Is the plot of my story original??

Question

Mrs.A's daughter (Ellen) eloped with a poor guy,and Ellen dies after having a miscarriage. Mrs.A has a deep scar: she feels betrayed by her daughter,and always repeats to herself "if only she had listened to me!"

Then, a girl name Ann (16yrs old) becomes the ward of Mrs.A's handsome but apathetic cousin,Mr. Rutherford. Ann reminds Mrs.A of Ellen--Ann is spirited and strong-headed. Mrs.A feels it her duty to direct Ann down the right path."Ann will die like Ellen if she doesn't obey me!" thinks Mrs.A.

So, when Mr.Rutherford passes Charlote down to Mrs.A's care.Ann is devastated cuz she was in love with Mr.Rutherford (a childish infatuation?)

Mrs.A becomes a bit violent at times.She shatters Ann's self-confidence,and also makes Ann physically weak. Mrs.A feels that if Ann relies on her, mind and body, then Ann wont go the wrong path....

And then 3yrs later,Mr.Rutherford returns,and sees how much Ann has changed. Ann blames him for what she has become.There's romance too~

Mr. Rutherford also reads Ann'e diary, and sees how Mrs.A had been abusive. He feels guilty for not having taken more responsibility over Ann, Through his selfishness and apathy, he sees the consequence of his character

Answer 1

Well, there is no story that is "original" in concept, it is only the details and the style of the writing that determines whether something is fresh.

When I read this (including the mistake "Charlote" -- which I think was supposed to be "Ann"), I 'm inclined to think you are modeling another plot from a story similar to "Jane Eyre" or something. (Is that true?)

In any case, I do like the setup. You've got::
1. A maternal figure who is doing all the wrong things for the right reasons.
2. A paternal figure who remains uninvolved and then comes to regret it.
3. A young woman with a crush on a man she cannot be with, and who is trying but failing to survive the manipulations of her authority figure (Mrs. A).

Another poster did point out (rightly) that this is merely a setup, but you have no real conclusion/climax yet. So you need to decide what the characters want and what they decide to do. You need to resolve questions like:

1. Does Mrs. A suceed in beating down Ann's resistance... and does she ever come to see the error of her ways?

2. Does Ann ever fight back and triumph against Mrs. A; and does she resolve her anger and/or love for Mr. R?

3. Does Mr. R choose to intervene, or does he remain apathetic, deciding it's not his problem? Can he accept partial blame for what happened to Ann?

A good climax will tie up all these loose conflicts.

Answer 2

You are missing a climax (unless that's when the man dude returns ..and you need resolutionor sometime of conclusion where something had bees taught, learned.moral fo the story...etc.. it could work..sounds very anne of green gable-ish ..I'd say go to the loacal bookstore and get a book on creative writing, or better yet just look it up on the net there are outlines you can use to create a more exciting and well put together back bone for your story..
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Answer 3

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Answer 4

Original? No, not really. Interesting? No, not really.

Answer 5

of course.

Answer 6

LOL how retarded