love is a feeling,
love is a game,
something we lose,
something we gain,
that buzz,that beat,
that rush of excitement,
when life just seems so sweet!
we wear tinted glasses,
denying any bad from love,
when nothing is clear,
its just like mud,
we all think and breathe the same,
love..is it a game??
happiness is all we strive,
anything for that feeling of being alive,
too much time can be dedicated to is this the one?
we almost forget a relationship can be fun!
gain your trust and feeling in one another,
you know deep down if your made for one another!!
thanks for taking the time to read it!!
2006-11-09 13:15:10 · 28 answers · asked by Lydia K 4 in Family & Relationships ➔ Other - Family & Relationships
Very nice...you little romantic.......a poem or a song?
You wrote this....I love it!!!!!
2006-11-09 13:23:32 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 2⤋
As a fellow poet of too many years to remember - very good. One critism, I would try and re-word the line "it's just like mud", it doesn't quiet fit. As a fellow poet I won't put words into your mouth (poetry always has to be personal), but I do believe that line needs a little work.
Otherwise, keep up the good work, and keep on writing.
2006-11-09 23:59:59 · answer #2 · answered by spear_1021 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Very Nice
2006-11-09 13:17:24 · answer #3 · answered by dreamy 5 · 1⤊ 1⤋
Errrrrrrm - It wasn't terrible? Make a better song than poem
2006-11-09 13:20:59 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Pretty sweet. I like it because its true, we do wear rose colored glasses sometimes in relationships not willing to admit that our partners have flaws, as we do. Its time we wake up and smell the roses instead of.....
2006-11-09 13:18:34 · answer #5 · answered by NIKFAY 2 · 1⤊ 1⤋
Best one I've heard in a long time. Keep up the good work
2006-11-09 13:19:50 · answer #6 · answered by anuron2000 2 · 1⤊ 1⤋
I liked it much better than those depressing ones I see on here all the time.
2006-11-09 13:18:37 · answer #7 · answered by my two cents 6 · 1⤊ 1⤋
Sounds good
Keep it up
Practice makes perfect
Deep emotions make poets out of all of us
2006-11-09 13:18:09 · answer #8 · answered by Little Wifey 5 · 1⤊ 1⤋
I like it. I'm always amazed at how you poet types can get stuff to rhyme so nicely.
2006-11-09 20:40:56 · answer #9 · answered by chickyboo222 5 · 1⤊ 1⤋
It was going sooo well till I got to the word
MUD?
Then my heart went Thud?
So it an't any good?
2006-11-09 13:26:36 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 1⤋
Very nice and obviously from the heart.
2006-11-09 13:17:46 · answer #11 · answered by pb 2 · 1⤊ 1⤋