As Katherine, Nicholas, and their father left the library on Tuesday, the high school marching band played in the distance, and Katherine stopped to listen the the beat of the drum cadence.
2006-11-09 08:03:22 · 6 answers · asked by lam2210 1 in Education & Reference ➔ Homework Help
Yes, and its also tooooo long
2006-11-09 08:06:20 · answer #1 · answered by red 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
As Katherine, Nicholas and their father left the library on Tuesday, the high school marching band played in the distance and Katherine stopped to listen the the beat of the drum cadence.
2006-11-09 16:45:28 · answer #2 · answered by Lyney 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
As Katherine, Nicholas, and their father left the library on Tuesday, Katherine stopped to listen to the beat of the drum coming from the high school marching band playing in the distance.
You don't want to use beat and cadence together here as it would be redundant.
2006-11-09 16:16:14 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋
the only necessary one is after 'distance.'
2006-11-09 16:07:41 · answer #4 · answered by wildbill05733 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it's really ok but you could eliminate the one between "distance" and "and".
2006-11-09 16:11:27 · answer #5 · answered by Maria 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
are you asked to correct this or are you writing this?
2006-11-09 16:06:43 · answer #6 · answered by Eric 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋