I Love To Live
Today dear Lord, I'm 80, and there's much I haven't done,
I hope dear Lord, You'll let me live until I'm 81.
but then if I haven't finished all I want to do, Would you please let me stay awhile until I'm 82?
So many places I want to go, So very much to see Do you think you could manage to make it 83?
the world is changing very fast, there is so much in store. I'd like it very much to live until I'm 84 . and, if by then I'm still alive I'd like to stay till 85! More planes will be up in the air, so I'd really like to stay and see what happens to the world when I turn 86. I know dear Lord, its much to ask, (and it must be nice in heaven). But I'd really like to stay until I'm 87. I know by then I would be fast, and sometimes will be later. But it would be so pleasant to be around at 88. I will have seen so many things and had a wonderful time. So, I'm sure that I'll be willing to leave at the age of 89, maybe just one more thing I'd like to say dear Lord, I thank you kindly. But if its okay with you, I'd love to live past 90.
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2006-11-09 02:46:41 · 3 answers · asked by Veronica S 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
THERE IS SO MUCH LEFT IN THE WORLD TO FIX SO I WOULD LIKE TO STAY TILL 86. I know dear Lord, its much to ask, (and it must be nice in heaven). But I'd really like to stay until I'm 87. LORD YOU HAVE JUST TAKEN MY MATE I WOULD LIKE TO STAY TILL 88.TO FIND ANOTHER I will have seen so many things and had a wonderful time. So, I'm sure that I'll be willing to leave at the age of 89, maybe just one more thing I'd like to say dear Lord, I thank you kindly. But if its okay with you, I'd love to live past 90.TO 91 SO I WILL HAVE 1 TO GROW ON AND PERHAPS LORD SINCE I HAVE BEEN SO GOOD I COULD SKIP A FEW STRAIGHT TO 102
2006-11-09 03:04:57 · answer #1 · answered by Talking Hat 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Your poem is absolutely wonderful. I wouldn't change a thing except the formatting. You have written it as one big chunk. I would break it up something like this:
Today dear Lord I'm 80, and there's much I haven't done,
I hope dear Lord you'll let me live until I'm 81-
But then if I haven't finished all I want to do
Would you please let me stay awhile until I'm 82?
So many places I want to go- so very much to see...
Do you think you could manage to make it 83?
The world is changing very fast; there is so much in store-
I would like it very much to live til 84- and if by then I'm still alive I'd like to stay till 85!
More planes will be up in the air, so I'd really like to stay
And see what happens to the world when I turn 86.
(this is actually a bit of a rough spot. You are using rhyme up to this point and then suddenly stop. I don't want to rewrite for you though - You are doing fine on your own.)
I know dear Lord, it's much to ask
(and it must be nice in Heaven.)
But I'd really like to stay until I'm 87.
I know by then I will be fast(?) and sometimes will be later(?)
(Did you mean - "I know by then I won't be fast and sometimes will be late.")
But it would be so pleasant to be around at 88.
I will have seen so many things and had a wonderful time-
So I'm sure that I'll be willing to leave at the age of 89.
Maybe just one more thing I'd like to say
Dear Lord, I thank you kindly
But if it's okay with you, I'd like to live past 90.
......This is a wonderful poem. I think you should submit it to a few places. Try Readers Digest, Modern Maturity, AARP; If they publish they will reformat to their tastes anyway. I love your optimism and have never read a poem like this. I just lost my mom at 83 and this reminded me of her. I hope you have many healthy years ahead of you.
2006-11-09 12:56:50 · answer #2 · answered by peggy j 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it needs formating into poem style thats all
2006-11-09 10:55:55 · answer #3 · answered by cameron b 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋