While a smoker is puffing away at a cigarette to get their nicotine fix, smoke inhalation causes the blood pressure to rise, putting more strain on the heart.
I think the sentence structure is wrong...but I am not sure.
2006-11-08 22:19:33 · 8 answers · asked by charming_imogen 2 in Education & Reference ➔ Words & Wordplay
Smoking causes blood pressure to rise placing strain on the hearts muscles, smokers find the habit hard to “kick” because nicotine is addictive.
2006-11-08 22:25:02 · answer #1 · answered by deadkelly_1 6 · 0⤊ 1⤋
While a smoker puffs away at a cigarette to get their nicotine fix, the inhalation of smoke causes their blood pressure to rise putting strain on their heart.
ADD: Actually, I was just re-reading this and still seems wrong.
It should read: While smokers puff away at cigarettes to get their nicotine fix, the inhalation of the smoke causes their blood pressure to rise putting a strain on the their heart.
or
While a smoker is puffing away at a cigarette to get his nicotine fix, smoke inhalation is causing his blood pressure to rise, putting more strain on his heart.
MUCH BETTER!! :-)
2006-11-09 00:14:57 · answer #2 · answered by cyndi71mom 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
A smoker puffs away on a cigarette to obtain their nicotine fix, but yet the smoke inhalation causes the blood pressure to rise, thereby putting more stress on the heart.
2006-11-08 23:53:29 · answer #3 · answered by tombraider 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Ãts OK the way it is but, I would prefer:
While the smoker is getting their nicotine fix by puffing away on a cigarette, smoke inhalation causes the blood pressure to rise, thus putting more strain on the heart.
The comma needs to be there in your sentence, and in mine, as
you need to clarify two clauses.
2006-11-08 22:36:28 · answer #4 · answered by cloud43 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
While smokers are puffing away at cigarettes to get their nicotine fix, smoke inhalation causes their blood pressure to rise, putting more strain on their hearts.
Just the singular/plural thing is now all one way instead of part singular and part plural I changed everything to plural.
2006-11-08 22:22:58 · answer #5 · answered by stymie1970 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Smokers puff away on cigarettes to obtain a nicotine fix, but , at the same time, causing their blooding pressure to rise and putting more strain on their heart.
2006-11-08 22:22:23 · answer #6 · answered by Teddy 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Every smoke inhalation, causes blood raising and in addition more strain is put on the heart.
2006-11-08 22:25:31 · answer #7 · answered by disco ball 4 · 0⤊ 1⤋
leave out the comma after the word rise. The sentence should not pause, and your statement " smoke inhalation causes the blood pressure to rise" is important, therefore it should not be set off by commas. :)
2006-11-08 22:22:22 · answer #8 · answered by chance m 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋