Poem about a disability called '' With and Without you ''do you like this?

Question

Hi,I'm 13 and I'm in a wheelchair (Muscular Dystrophy I wrote this poem.Let me know if ya like it thanks!!

With You Part I

I'm sitting here in this chair,
you take from me,
and have no soul,
I'm getting weak,
fading away...,
when I feel like crying,
I smile today,
I wait with courage,
hope and fear,
I'm wonderin' why,
you're still here,
For each time I cry,
You take more,
I want to stop it,
you don't care,
Not long ago you got a name,
The doctors told me,
you're my disability,
For you I live,
happy but pained,
I'm sick of you,
You should be ashamed.

Without You Part II

Without You I'd be free,
I'd go on with life alone,
Why you still here with me?
I push you away run and scream,
Why you still followin' me?
If I throw a bone,
Will you leave?
You make things hard,
hard to breathe,
Fighting you I am still,
If only there was a magic pill,
Fightin' hard living strong,
Wake me up inside,
Make me feel alive,
How would it be,
without you?

I write these kinds of poems all the time it's a great hobby. I find I just get certain words stuck in my head and I just start writing them.

This poem is available for copying since you asked. I would love to have more people read. Thanks y'all!

*revised 2nd part*

Without You Part II

Without you I'd be free,
Many battles alone,
I've fought myself,
Underwater I am,
Going under all alone,
Drowning under here,
My mind is not calm,
but full of fear,
I don't wanna drown,
all alone shaken cold,
Screaming as loud as I can,
waiting for someone to hold my hand.

Please let me know which part is better. Thank you all very much!!!!!!!!:)

Answer 1

I love it. I am also handicapped & my grandfather wrote this poem 30 years ago about me & my sister.
Give them laughter
Give them joy
For they can be
What we forsee
With love & help from you & me
A little help from the rich & poor
Could open up a sunshine door
To let them do the things they should
Without the use of metal and wood
For those of us blessed with good health
A thought we should endow
To dedicate a purpose in life
To help these children now.

Although he's been gone 7 years he was & will always be my hero

Answer 2

I think your poem is incredible! Even more so because of your age. There are words to describe a talent such as yours, I don't know them but I believe if you sent that poem to publications for persons with disabilities it certainly would be published.

May I copy your poem and take it to some people I know who still work in Rehab hospitals?

Answer 3

firstly id like to say for a 13 year old that is an amazing poem, many people in your position could relate and find inspiration through this, i wright poems about my own life and experiences and find them a great help with the quality of your poem you should make it a Hobie you never no underlying skills like this can take a person far nice one i like it

Answer 4

Your brain is strong. Your thoughts are free . Your mind is like a wild stallion !
Hang on tight and RIDE !