I added it to the Y! capsule. Does it give good imagery? I wrote it 10 years ago. The end of the poem signifies hope for the future, so make a wish at the end of the poem:
Walk on the Beach
Crashing waves, blowing beaches, sunsetting, tears falling, tide rising, doves calling, lighthouse lights, ship sailing, sky darkens, stars twinkle, falling star make a wish.
2006-11-05 09:09:44 · 24 answers · asked by JustJane 6 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
Ok, maybe it uses too much literary symbolism.
2006-11-05 09:38:29 · update #1
thats really nice...perhaps ivy league even :)
2006-11-05 14:05:33 · answer #1 · answered by Circlometry™³ 6 · 2⤊ 0⤋
What can I say... you did wrote this "poem" 10 years ago so I could only imagine that you have either gotten better or have stopped writing everything you see.
FYI: for all it's worth; I think your OK, but where you the one crying on that beach ?
2006-11-05 17:29:57 · answer #2 · answered by mr.chrisrolle 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think it is beautiful! I wrote a poem about the beach but I am too nervous to show anybody. Only a couple of people have read it. Congrats!
2006-11-05 17:12:49 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 1⤋
It's nice, can picture it in a way, love the ending part, very nice for the reader to feel a part of the magic
2006-11-05 17:13:20 · answer #4 · answered by jacqueline6001 4 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Nice, made me wish I was at the shore right now.
2006-11-05 17:15:25 · answer #5 · answered by Steph 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i think the people who said beautiful and good just want to be made the best answer.. to be honest with you whats wrong with your poem is it doesnt have any meaning..
2006-11-05 17:15:57 · answer #6 · answered by Danger! 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very nice..paints a clear picture in my head. Thanx for sharing it with us.
2006-11-05 17:14:27 · answer #7 · answered by ... 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I really liked it..makes you picture and imagine every aspect of it. Great job....keep up the good work............ :)
2006-11-05 17:15:17 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
add a comma after falling star it will make it more romantic i really enjoyed it! keep on writing!!!!!!!!
2006-11-05 17:14:09 · answer #9 · answered by Tim Rohan 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
i like it! hopefully my wish comes true!
2006-11-05 17:18:04 · answer #10 · answered by bri 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋