Love is a river
That flows so deep
But it's not what you think
The love between man and woman
But the love between friends
Being there for them
The love between friends
Right at the time you know when
You're gonna be best friends
You're gonna be best friends
For life until death
The love between friends
I have a friend that I wrote this for. She's my best friend and she's always great to talk to, etc.
2006-11-05 02:15:46 · 28 answers · asked by ♥#1 Miley Cyrus Fan♥ 5 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
My friend isn't home right now but she has yahoo messanger like me, so i sent it to her yahoo messanger, because as soon as she gets on the computer, she will check it, and then see the poem lol.
2006-11-05 02:27:49 · update #1
Hey guys, my friend im'd me earlier and she loved the poem i wrote for her!!!
2006-11-05 08:45:50 · update #2
very meaningful LOVE IT
2006-11-05 02:16:45 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Very lesbianesque. You may be best friends now but relationships change You will have many more friends before you die & some of them you will consider best friends also. I hope you are still in touch with each other 50 years from now & that will be the true meaning of best friend. Even if you don't see each other for years when you talk it will be like you saw each other yesterday.
2006-11-05 10:29:40 · answer #2 · answered by ChaliQ 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Its meaningful, nice, but I have couple notes for you
one is that you degraded the love between a man and a woman while its naturally more precious.
the other is that the poem formation itself could be improved if you used words with similar endings at the end of each phrase.
also one of the important elements of a good poem is to activate the readers' imagination like to involve nature scenes, compare similarities or include opposites.
you have good potential really
2006-11-05 10:28:02 · answer #3 · answered by Mido Elmasry 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Reads more like a letter than a poem and rivers don't flow deep they run deep. Try this;
The river of love runs deep between best friends,
being there, loving them, that friendship never ends.
You know it in the moment best friend should never part.
You feel it until death, your friend she has your heart.
See if that doesn't sound better.
2006-11-05 10:43:36 · answer #4 · answered by LORD Z 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
If you use punctuation to show the beginning and end of a thought and where to pause in in the middle will help show the distinctions better in the poem. Otherwise it reads very nicely. Gl
2006-11-05 10:20:45 · answer #5 · answered by Ladythang 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Love, is like an active river
flowing, through ups and downs
bumps and curves
it remains consistent
just like the love i have for you
the water runs deep
maybe that can help lol
i dno....this poem is kinda not organized well
2006-11-05 10:22:32 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
it's alright, I would try to rhyme everyother line, you have deep think with a long E sound in both then woman, friends them with a short E sound but repeat it for lines, if you start with a rhyme you should continue with it to make it flow more, otherwise it has great meaning to it. Good Job.
2006-11-05 10:19:26 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
yeah 2 points
2006-11-05 10:19:06 · answer #8 · answered by mrs.bloom411 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's beautiful.....and I'm sure your friend enjoyed it even more, because it is about her! One of the greatest gifts we can receive, true and honest loving feelings!
2006-11-05 10:17:50 · answer #9 · answered by emotional blonde 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Good poem. I am sure your friend will really appriciate it. It's good to know you have friends to depend on.
2006-11-05 10:20:13 · answer #10 · answered by guitardan 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's good,but it sounds like it ws written for a guy.
2006-11-05 10:17:00 · answer #11 · answered by Celebrity girl 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋