How is this poem ............ ?

Question

I was a desert
A dark and empty desert
Where the wind blows for no one
For no one
Where dust clouds rise
Among the gloom
And bring darkness
To that lonely desert

Neither man nor beast
Dare venture there
For no bird ever sing
Nor mice ever roam
But then one day
When the sandstorms swept

An old man came
A man with a beard as white as snow
Which blew with the wind.
He came one day and
Wandered through that vast desert
And by a tree with a thousand year thirst
He sat, He sat there
He sat there for days and days
Then one day he, Awoke from his thoughts
And walked away
And as he walked from
That dry dead desert
All around
Flowers bloomed,
Birds sang,
Rivers flowed

And that tree by which he sat
Fulfilled its thirst
From the rain which fell
Enriching the dry sand
The dry sand
Which once blew up sandstorms
But now the breeze fills
Those mountains of green
Which were once sand

And that man,
Who was that man?
A priest? A saint?
No, he was a poet

One of my friends wrote. I think its good. What do you think ?

Its NOT my poem...

Answer 1

It is a wonderful poem with an elegant, eleatic tone throughout. Tell your friend to keep writing! =^..^=

Answer 2

It's tranquil. Reminds me of the parable of the Fig Tree in Matt. 24.-- Isreael is symbolic of the Tree and when she became a nation in 1948 that was the beginning of her bloom. This generation shall by no means pass away until all that is prophesized about her in the book of Rev. come to pass. I would encourage you to read Revelation if you like metaphor & poetry. It's symbolic, but every symbol is explained somewhere else in the Bible. www.khouse.org has some great broadcasts to help understand it...just click on the 66/40 radio show link. Really helpful info there. I really liked the poem though. I think I might try a meditation on it and walk through that land myself. I am also a poet. You can read some of my poetry at www.gigisart.com xoxo

Answer 3

Not very good. Overall Grade D+

Answer 4

I think it is a good poem. Figurative language, free verse, good use of parallelism, and it may as well be an ars poetica. A good beginning.

Answer 5

yurn poem is great. in upper stanzas it shows sad state of human mind, then as poetry comes in form of old man our human minds spring with joy of happines, clamness, joy e.t.c.
once again I say yur poem is beautiful, as it shows reflextion of human mind in it. As they say "Good poem comes from beautiful mind only". So keep on writting poems like this, so it can quench the thirst of many thirsty minds.

Answer 6

A very nice poem. I like it. Well done..

Answer 7

Ure's right

Answer 8

very nice

Answer 9

it's good, but not great.