"Griffith focuses on the ideas of the Romantic era and Psychoanalytical theories to reveal that an inner monster is present throughout every person’s unconscious mind, and argues that the desire to seek intellectual pursuit while going against the natural order can only lead to great loss."
This is my thesis for the novel Frankenstein by Mary Shelley just incase anyone was wondering
2006-11-04 04:49:39 · 12 answers · asked by Kiwi 1 in Education & Reference ➔ Words & Wordplay
i dont see anything wrong with it
2006-11-04 04:51:21 · answer #1 · answered by Melissa<3 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It would be better like this.
"Griffith focuses on the ideas of the Romantic Era, and Psychoanalytical Theories, to reveal that an inner monster is present throughout every person’s unconscious mind. He argues that the desire to seek intellectual pursuit, whilst going against the natural order, can only lead to great loss."
2006-11-04 13:38:00 · answer #2 · answered by quatt47 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It would sound better if you added a little more descriptive detail, something like "........the beliefs of the Romantic era, and the conclusions of Psychoanalytical theories, to reveal that........". I would also agree with the others; try to avoid long sentences.
2006-11-04 12:57:06 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Looks fine to me. Do you need to capitalize 'Psychoanalytical?' That's a great book
PS, you DO need the comma after 'unconscious mind' because this sentence has two predicates: Griffin focuses AND argues.
2006-11-04 12:53:21 · answer #4 · answered by Miss Cobra Town 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i'd drop the comma after "unconscious mind". but that's just me.
otherwise, sounds great. good luck on the thesis, pally!
2006-11-04 12:51:45 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Get rid of the comma before the word 'and'
2006-11-04 12:51:31 · answer #6 · answered by cabjr1961 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
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2006-11-04 12:51:24 · answer #7 · answered by Stranger 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Mainly, but try to avoid run-on sentances.
2006-11-04 12:51:36 · answer #8 · answered by getshorty 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
".....monster is present throughout every person's ....." - change the word "throughout" to "within".
2006-11-04 12:53:52 · answer #9 · answered by Scabius Fretful 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Sounds good and logical to me.
2006-11-04 12:51:37 · answer #10 · answered by fisch_maegg 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it's sort of a run on sentence
2006-11-04 13:05:49 · answer #11 · answered by rixie987 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋