everyone says that I'm talented in writing, do I? but why I never win such writing competitions in school, even if I've done my best? i don't think I am really talented at all. I know I'm not confident, so what do you think about this (a piece of my poem)? Honestly. thanks everyone.
I can feel your presence beside me when you’re absent,
As clearly as a vista when the fog faded and the rainbow emerged
Because when you’re absent, my child, I opened my heart,
and the memories of time we spent together are widely ajar.
Do you know the future, lad?
So just closed your eyes and find it.
Because the future is at the front of the leading lead of this very road,
Smelled like summer in the breeze of the winter’s wind.
As I’m convinced to your rejoinder someday,
And we’ll be there laying our back upon the real savannah,
watching the stars in the depth of the night,
placing our parted heart to a whole union.
2006-11-03 16:13:44 · 5 answers · asked by wonder why 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
Wow...that was beautiful...just check ur grammar and u'll be fine. Personally, I like poems that rhyme...but ur poem was breath-taking nonetheless. Mb the person that keeps on beating you simply has something better. Ask to see their writing pieces. I love romantic stuff, and this poem was a real treat. Thank you for bringing something beautiful in my life!
2006-11-03 16:25:44 · answer #1 · answered by fliptastic 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Sorry (well...not really, you've opened yourself to constructive criticism on the internet...) but, your opening paragraph shows you are not a talented writer in the English language.
No offense, just the reality of it.
As for the poetry, rhyming or not, I am noone to judge. I would just expect basic grammAr to be a prerequisite to be considered a talented writer. JMHO!
2006-11-04 00:31:54 · answer #2 · answered by duhgbert 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Personally I like rhyming poems. I must say you have a very creative side. Thus you have alot of talent. Keep up the good work and keep them coming.
2006-11-04 00:25:06 · answer #3 · answered by Al Eintstien 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I can tell you that that is a good poem because I could never come close to writing anything like that, I'm more of a math person.
2006-11-04 00:22:08 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Somewhat talented, but you might want to look at some of the grammer mistakes. Other than that, it was really good, you might want to get copyrights.
2006-11-04 00:19:29 · answer #5 · answered by nemcc RN 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋