I was twelve when I realized my mother really wasn’t right about some things. I had ridden my mountain bike to the Wentworth Dam and sat at the edge of one of its concrete tiers watching the cliff swallows.
I watched them twirl and spin in the air above the roaring water and then plunge into the broad face of the sand stone cliff at the other side of the dam. There homes were burrowed into the sandstone with an opening about the size of a twelve-year-old’s hand. They would swoop down in a large arc, full speed, and the fold the wings in at the last minute as the popped into their doorways
My mother had said animals we not intelligent and had no soul. I suspected on that summer morning she was wrong about some animals and hence – what else was she wrong about?
I couldn’t tell if my father wasn’t right about some thing because my father never spoke to me except to tell me to do my chores or ride on the correct side of the street. Oh – he had also once taught me how to repair...
2006-11-03 10:24:43 · 9 answers · asked by Ralph 7 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
Not a subject that captures my attention, but I'm sure there are some hippies somewhere with the spare time to read that drivel.
2006-11-03 10:40:16 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 2⤋
Yes, it's good. You have talent. It has tone and style. The description is superb. Just make sure you have someone proof read your work before you post in a public place so that you don't lose anybodies interest. Thanks for a pleasant read, and I want to read more. I would definitely buy your work. Keep at it. I doubt that you're a lost soul. My bet is that you're a particularly sensitive soul.
2006-11-03 10:33:19 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋
Um, its a little dramatic isnt it?! I perfer teen age dramas, but im sure someone will enjoy it, for each thier own!
2006-11-03 10:27:54 · answer #3 · answered by Bridgette ♥ 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I gave up part way through the 2nd paragraph
2006-11-03 10:26:38 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yes I would keep reading
2006-11-03 10:27:59 · answer #5 · answered by leah p 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Its interesting I guess, but you need to add more. I dont know, it seems kind of iffy. And whatever suits your fancy... I'd read it.
2006-11-03 10:28:12 · answer #6 · answered by Hitori M 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Yes, I would continue to read your story.
2006-11-03 10:26:54 · answer #7 · answered by Stephanie F 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
yeah, seems interesting to me. like a coming of age story.
2006-11-03 10:27:48 · answer #8 · answered by delightfulone87 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
It's a little shaky but i would keep reading.
2006-11-03 10:31:40 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋