I'm on a road to poverty, Hot on the heels of success,
My heart is feeling empty, My mind so full of stress,
So goes the life of a poet, A construction worker laid off,
Every door leading to a regular job, leaves me in the cold with a cough.
All my acquaintances say I should build for myself,
Relying on me before seeking another,
Caught between a rock and a hard place,
How Lonely it is,Oh Brother!
In life we all need someone,
No regrets, No games, No Lies,
Getting discouraged plants tears, In the most un-crying eyes!
Family can be there for you, in times you feel you'll fail,
Or maybe you feel you have nobody, and that depression will prevail?
Reckless abandon pacifies, But true Love takes it's time,
Lost is He who looks in the wrong places, haste his only crime!
Only when I feel that way again, will I feel I need that chance,
Very anxious to stand before, My love..our first dance.
Eating my words is fattening, but low in cholesterol,
I'm walking while learnin 2crawl
2006-11-03 10:14:18 · 6 answers · asked by 35 YEARS OF INTUITION 4 in Social Science ➔ Psychology
i think you have a serious insight on writing about feelings..each person will be affected differently when reading this..
2006-11-03 14:57:38 · answer #1 · answered by STORMY K 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
So, the title seems to be I'm Searching for Love but there's a random "I" at the end!
Anyway, I like it. It was really good up until the end which kind of got off track for me. It seems to lose some rhythm there in the last few lines...
But other than that, I enjoyed it!
2006-11-03 10:25:19 · answer #2 · answered by SweetestSarah 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Did you write this? The title down the side "I'm searching for love" is neat and original. It's hard to tell from context if the poem is about success in love or success in one's career or success in life in general; the main focus isn't all that clear. However, I think it's good poetry overall.
2006-11-03 10:26:19 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
im searching for love....thats really good
2006-11-03 10:23:07 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
wow.....just .....wow!.....did you write this?...if so....ur really good!
its so deep and emotinal.....really captivating.....
"Im searching for love" fantastic title......i loved it!
2006-11-03 11:15:04 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
can I use it?
2006-11-03 11:03:34 · answer #6 · answered by Lou 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋