Twas the day after Halloween
(based off Twas the night before Christmas)
Twas the night after Halloween
When all through the streets
Not a kid was stirring,
Nor were the streets were neat.
Pumpkins’ lights went dark
And dressed up dogs didn’t bark.
People slept through the night,
Seeing Jason in sight.
Rain came,
Why shouldn’t it be a pain?
Then Jason flew,
And turned into goo!
The dogs growled,
And people went on the prowl.
Snow came,
In the state of Maine.
Tornados also flew in,
destroying, it is the wind!
Ninjas fought,
And bought Salem’s Lot.
My name is Jay,
What a way to end a Halloween day.
2006-11-01 14:46:18 · 18 answers · asked by Anthony 4 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
It's very silly, really!
2006-11-01 14:53:48 · update #1
I like it but some parts I didn't understand. I think you r a great poet.
2006-11-01 14:55:39 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
It has potential, but definitely needs work. It is weak in areas because some of it doesn't make sense and is confusing to the reader. The fourth line you put the word "were" in twice; you don't need it in the latter part of the that line. You have what it takes to be a good poet. I encourage you to keep writing, find your voice in it, and keep crafting your skill.
2006-11-01 22:59:31 · answer #2 · answered by ? 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I give 5 thumbs up
2006-11-01 22:49:08 · answer #3 · answered by justmejimw 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
haha jason turned into goo!
i have no idea who jason is or what his goo transformation has to do with the rest of the poem but its pretty funny.
i like it!
2006-11-01 23:02:12 · answer #4 · answered by The Bonnator 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I think its cool, interesting but kool. it kinda sounds like a halloween i would be interested in being apart of! ( I think)lol
2006-11-01 22:51:29 · answer #5 · answered by Donneal B 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
That it needs a lot of work, It doesn't really make sense at some parts. Keep at it though.
2006-11-01 22:48:25 · answer #6 · answered by ~SSIRREN~ 6 · 1⤊ 1⤋
Scary! Not bad..scared me a little...smile
2006-11-01 22:52:21 · answer #7 · answered by soundlady 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I think that you should publish it in your school newspaper! ^_^. But crap,Halloween is over.Make another poem and post it!
2006-11-01 22:55:36 · answer #8 · answered by Starbuks 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Good effort, needs improvement though. Sorry.
2006-11-01 22:49:47 · answer #9 · answered by Chocoholic 4 · 0⤊ 1⤋
The first stanza was good, but the syllable count was off. The rest kind of sucked. Actually it really sucked.
2006-11-01 22:48:39 · answer #10 · answered by anonymous 6 · 1⤊ 3⤋