you don't control me anymore you can't make me cry all I want you to do is just sit there and die because the way you make me feel I really hope your proud you made this little angel the person you see now you made me sad and lonely and a little bit pissed but i still want to thank you 'cause now im stronger and smarter and more on my own and thanks for makeing not able to trust but there is one thing i know im not ever gonna do is ever go back to you. because you hit me once you hit me twice. how do i know if there is a next time? so leaving you was the best thing i could do. but these scars still remain buring and hurting and reminding me of you. so i wish it would all just go away...
im not finished with this though but how is it so far???
2006-11-01 11:17:50 · 18 answers · asked by Anonymous in Family & Relationships ➔ Other - Family & Relationships
pretty good, you should be proud of yourself...
2006-11-01 11:34:31 · answer #1 · answered by MidnightSkies 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Not bad, but a little too much elaboration. Try to put it into a poetry. And let me tell you something: no guy should be able to make you unhappy or lonely, because you have to find happiness within yourself. And don't talk about wishing someone dead either, because life has a way to fire that one right back in your face. The bottom line is, that if you are unhappy and not able to forgive, it is your misery, not the misery of the person you are unhappy about---so give that some thought too. Good Luck
2006-11-01 11:24:31 · answer #2 · answered by MARIANNE G 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
First and foremost the Greatest thing you did was leave the person that hit you!! It's good so far but you really should'ent let this one person make you not trust anyone else. Next time you get into a realationship please don't take your anger from this one out on them, they don't deserve to suffer for someone eles mistake.
2006-11-01 11:23:27 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Don't EVER go back. Your head's still on straight. Omit the louse from your life before it becomes an infestation. And it will if you don't. I gotta get in the shower now, and rid myself of these nasty microbes. Love ya. Good luck.
2006-11-01 11:22:13 · answer #4 · answered by Johnny P 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
It looks like it would make a great song. I know it's a first draft but you need some punctuation in there to make it easier to read. Don't quit.
2006-11-01 11:28:47 · answer #5 · answered by nursesr4evr 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Pain does indeed need to be dealt with. Over time pain will diminish if no steps are taken, yet if we take no steps to heal is it really ever gone? Good luck to you!
2006-11-01 11:30:17 · answer #6 · answered by yourluckystar69 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I would use some more punctuation to make it easier to read, but other than that, I like it.
Good luck in the future!
2006-11-01 11:23:09 · answer #7 · answered by 飞行高 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
i would kinda make it shorter and only say one thing once, it's kinda a mess.. and reread your stuff cause some of it doesn't make sense..
2006-11-01 12:04:48 · answer #8 · answered by ~broken~ 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
"makeing not able" should be "making me not able"?
Pretty good, you sound pissed but relieved at the same time.Sounds like my childhood.
2006-11-01 11:20:56 · answer #9 · answered by Dick Tater 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
if its a song fine if its your breaking up with some one they will probably just stare at it blankly.
2006-11-01 11:20:37 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
You rock girl!
2006-11-01 11:20:00 · answer #11 · answered by linnygirl06 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋