My heart bleeds from tears
But only on the inside do they appear
This feeling caused wont show
Everyone around will never know
In the corner do I hide these emotions and this pain
Because only to myself can i explain
Forever hidden in a book of hurt and lies
Featured inside are poems of love, pain and wanting to die
The person they all see and think they know
Its not me and the real me wont show
This compassionate and loving girl is not me
This disguise is what they see
So they think they know the truth, when it isnt even here
It will come out but only with a few tears
This disguise protects my heart and soul
Even if it means I have to be fake, wrong and cold.
2006-11-01 07:18:46 · 16 answers · asked by sweet18apparatus 4 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
That is beautiful. It's heartfelt and I used to write a lot and in High school I was picked best writer by the teachers. This poem seems as though you or whoever wrote this wasn't writing because they felt they had to but because these are feelings that plague them everyday. I feel that the only way to be a true writer is to be able to contact the feelings inside of you and bring them out in pictures instead of words and put those pictures into words on paper. It seems that's what the writer was doing and did a very good job at interpreting her own thoughts and pictures. That's what I do, I'm an only child so all I had was my own thoughts and imagination. Keep writing so you can get better and more refined and you could compile a book of poetry and get it published and make some good money off of it. Sorry that was my entrepreneurial side coming out of me. Good work though!!!! Practice makes perfect, you can be an excellent writer once you keep practicing and find your own style. Excellent hope to see more!
2006-11-01 07:43:51 · answer #1 · answered by EriksSweetheart 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
9/10
2006-11-01 09:30:16 · answer #2 · answered by Anry 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's very pretty, but do you have such a book of such strong feelings? 2 or 3 of the lines have too many or few syllables, but it's ok. From 1-10 I'd give it a 7.
2016-05-23 04:38:52 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
WOW I Honestly have never read a more heartfelt, touching and accurate description of what it's like being a young woman in today's insensitive world. Bravo!
2006-11-01 07:20:52 · answer #4 · answered by ? 5 · 2⤊ 1⤋
I really like it...theres alot of feeling behind it and most im sure are able to relate. I relly liked it! Keep up the good work.
2006-11-01 08:33:33 · answer #5 · answered by Perfectly Flawed 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
It is beautiful but really sad. I guess all people feel like they are disgusting themselves. I think you have a knack for writing poems.
2006-11-01 07:27:20 · answer #6 · answered by ♥♥Bree♥♥ 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
That was sad, but good.
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2006-11-01 08:13:26 · answer #7 · answered by Judas Rabbi 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I give it a 7/10.Nice,but i guess u could refine it a little.
2006-11-01 07:21:33 · answer #8 · answered by Sunrise 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Scale of 1-10.....
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2006-11-01 07:21:06 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 3⤋
I think it's good, but very sad if you really feel that way!
2006-11-01 07:21:24 · answer #10 · answered by Marygoroun(d) 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋