Online gambling- about a billion people in the u.s have complete acess to it, alot of these addicted people gamble on it for money(duh!) but some others use it for a different purpose, out their in another world a mafia group called the Slanders of Detroit, michigan-led by the mob boss Angelo Roils, the group makes mafia business online, htey even use various connections to take down their targets, they were the most dangerous thing on the web since the virus! they would send virus to starngers, download ohter peioples information, hack their privacy, the police would try and track them down but could not find them, but one person who was not a police officer nor a detective or anything to do with the force steped in, Andrew Scott, 26, Artist, ethic-african-american
andrew was a nice,smart guy who accidentally was forced into the underworld of the mafia for good or bad.
Title: The Real world
2006-11-01 03:51:37 · 4 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
6... it's a good story, but there are too many similar stories like this out there...
2006-11-01 04:00:28 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
6
2006-11-01 03:59:43 · answer #2 · answered by Mr. Girl Liker 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
1. There aren't a billion people in the U.S. You need to get your facts straight.
2. Mafia crime families are named after the family name of the main boss. Thus there would be no 'Slanders of Detroit' if the boss was named 'Roils'.
3. If it's the Italian Mafia, there is no Italian name 'Roils'.
4. If you're going to write a story, I would recommend either learning to spell, or using the spell check.
2006-11-01 04:02:46 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Aside from the spelling errors, I'd give it a 4. You need more drama to liven it up, otherwise, it could get too technical and bore readers.
2006-11-01 06:09:19 · answer #4 · answered by germaine_87313 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋