Wandering detatched, alone on the street
known as the "Ghost Daughter"
A foreboding presence, bitter and taunting
Killed by her beligerent father
The despairing spirit, once so loving of life
Never passed truely on
Her father so callous to end her life
She hopes for love but gets none
2006-11-01 02:42:36 · 14 answers · asked by Me♥Manatees 3 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
If you wrote this...and it seems you did...you have a wonderful gift.
But why so dark? Does this represent your life or someone you know?
I do hope this is not you, I truly do. The other poems you have in you must be wonderful. Please continue to share.
As a poem that conveys a message this is very good.
I do wish you well.
2006-11-01 02:50:01 · answer #1 · answered by John B 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This is good. It's dark, but there's nothing wrong with that at all, especially with the issue being addressed. I think you have potential and a lot of talent if you wrote this.
2006-11-01 10:57:35 · answer #2 · answered by Shadow 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Awesome
but i didnt think
******* chickens wrote poetry
2006-11-01 10:48:46 · answer #3 · answered by sweet18apparatus 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sounds like a prelude to a really good book. You should take it further....its really cool
2006-11-01 10:51:16 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Reminds me of Emily D. who talks or poet about (mostly) death, and sorrow, and these sad thing.......
2006-11-01 10:48:47 · answer #5 · answered by pheobe 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow, that is really sad. :( Beautifully written, but so depressing.
2006-11-01 10:46:18 · answer #6 · answered by . 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it!
2006-11-01 10:54:57 · answer #7 · answered by Momma Jo 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's lovely, but pretty sad...
: )
2006-11-01 10:48:29 · answer #8 · answered by rockiebattles411 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
yes you, it OK, I maybe miss somethings
2006-11-01 10:47:18 · answer #9 · answered by justmejimw 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very nice :-)
2006-11-01 10:46:42 · answer #10 · answered by Sunnie 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋