i am writing a scary story first of all. i wrote that the swings were swaying back and forth and made a squeaking sound. how could i write made a squeaking sound in vivid details? like for ex. in stead of he stepped on crumbs, he stepped on the bits of Lucky Charms. thanks please reply me as soon as possible. really need the help.
2006-10-31 23:27:42 · 5 answers · asked by Sarah S 3 in Education & Reference ➔ Homework Help
i need three better ways of writing that
2006-10-31 23:31:27 · update #1
INSTEAD OF THE SWINGS MAKING A SQUEAKING SOUND, I AM CHANGING IT to two girls dialing 911 but the phone line was dead and this made them nervous. i need to change the "this made them nervous" part
2006-10-31 23:36:24 · update #2
I DON'T NEED THE SWINGS PART NOW
2006-10-31 23:39:40 · update #3
This made them uneasy. Every sentence doesn't need to be a thriller, just use words that aren't so common.
Good luck!
2006-10-31 23:44:02 · answer #1 · answered by megha717 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
the swings were swaying back and forth and the squeaking sound they made echoed through the (park , backyard) like the leaves blowing down the the path to the (haunted house, school). your pick ing () have fun
2006-11-01 07:38:48 · answer #2 · answered by L. 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
"Crrrrrrrrrreeeeeeeaaaaaaakkkk - crrrrrrrrrrrreeeeeeaaaaakk - crrrrrrrrrreeeeeeeeaaaaaakkk
was the erie, ghostly sound being made by the swings as they mysteriously swayed back and forth and up and down with no wind to possibly move them at all!"
This should do it nicely.
Good luck!
2006-11-01 07:37:25 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
how about. the rusty squeak of the swings made my skin crawl
2006-11-01 07:30:06 · answer #4 · answered by uknowme 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
the full moon cast eerie muted shadows. the wind moaned through the trees making them dance in wild gyrations. the swings squeeked in protest as they swung around bumping into one another.............
2006-11-01 07:38:57 · answer #5 · answered by Sam 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋