Is this paragraph grammatically correct if not can you attempt to fix it, or even make more understandable?

Question

The whole paragraph most likely won't be able to fit, as long as its something, thanks.

It would be misleading to suggest that you can base your beliefs on something that is not entirely true. The profound necessities indulged with in any substantial form of religion, can be expounded upon by many different people viewing them from many different angels. Every viewed angle will one day make clear aspects to the direct states of the truth of reality. When that angle is seen clearly, it will form the religion that most of humanity will perpetually follow. The lack of insight with any given religious follower that has their own mandatory beliefs, will blind them from reality. No belief can be proved to be an onset for all humanity, because any religion that can be denied for any reason, really isn't a religion that is made for the world to follow. Every religion on the face of the planet as of right now can be denied, given any uncertain perceptive.

Answer 1

I'm not sure, but you may have a few unnecessay commas but that's punctuation, not grammar.
The only questionable sentence in terms of grammar is "The lack of insight with any given religious follower that has their own mandatory beliefs, will blind them them from reality."
The comma after beliefs is not needed and the subject refers to a singular person while the predicate refers to plural. Change it to either, "the lack of insight with any given religious follower that has his or her own mandatory beliefs" or "the lack of insight with any given religious followers that have their own mandatory beliefs."

Answer 2

It would be misleading to suggest that you can base your beliefs on something that is not entirely true. The profound necessities indulged (with Remove) (add another in) in any substantial form of religion ( remove, )can be expounded upon by many different people viewing them from many different angels (angels can be brought into it but, I'd leave them out. Sorry, couldn't resist. angles). Every viewed angle will one day make clear aspects to the direct states of the truth of (that?) reality. When that angle is seen clearly(remove,) it will form the religion that most of humanity will perpetually follow. The lack of insight with any given religious follower that has their own mandatory beliefs(remove,) will blind them (from, to??) reality. No belief can be proved to be an onset for all humanity( remove,) because (add,) any religion that can be denied for any reason, really isn't a religion that is made for the world to follow. Every religion on the face of the planet as of right now can be denied(remove,) given any uncertain (I know what you mean but wouldn't certain be better?) perceptive.

And for every comma I took out three people will add them back in. I think it flows better this way.

Answer 3

**"The profound necessities indulged with in any substantial form of religion, can be expounded upon by many different people viewing them from many different angels" -- Remove the comma, and I believe that angels should be angles.

**"The lack of insight with any given religious follower that has their own mandatory beliefs, will blind them from reality."-- You don't need a comma here, either.

**"No belief can be proved to be an onset for all humanity, because any religion that can be denied for any reason, really isn't a religion that is made for the world to follow." -- Work on this sentence. What you are saying makes sense, but the word structure makes it a little hard to follow. Maybe something like 'No belief can be proven to be an onset for all humanity. A religion that is capable of being denied for any reason is not a religion made for the world to follow.'

Hope this helps.

Answer 4

If this is an essay for high school or college, stick to one form of narration (3rd person) and do not slip into 2nd person narrative by using the pronoun "you." Use your spell check. You have both the heavenly beings, angels, and the geometrical construct, angles. Your second sentence is not clear to me--what are the profound necessitites? We do not indulge with, we indulge in. (Avoid using two prepositions back to back.) What have you really said by the end of the paragraph--that any religion that exists on earth can be shown to be false? Is your premise that no religion is true, or that there is no one religion that the entire world should follow? Or that no believer can have insight, or be objective? Be careful. Although this may simply be the introduction to a longer piece in which you will substantiate your thesis with examples, your purpose is unclear. With all due respect, it reads as if you wrote it when you were really tired or your mind was swimming from doing a lot of reading. Clarify your thinking and your purpose; this will help.

Answer 5

you use too many commas where no comma is needed.

"The profound necessities indulged with in any substantial form of religion, can be expounded upon by many different people viewing them from many different angels."

there should be no comma where you have it. also, the last word should be ANGLES, not ANGELS.

"The lack of insight with any given religious follower that has their own mandatory beliefs, will blind them from reality." also, no comma required.

"No belief can be proved [this should be "proven"] to be an onset for all humanity, because any religion that can be denied for any reason, [unnecessary comma] really isn't a religion that is made for the world to follow. "

and by the way, i disagree. too much opinion, not enough fact or logic.

Answer 6

Have you taken your meds today?

I assume that you did not write this yourself and that it is some sort of English exercise. If you did write it, redo it and say what you want to say straight out.

You can not base your beliefs on something that is not entirely true. To suggest that this would be possible would be misleading. There are many ways to interpret the basic tenant of the major world religions.

Oh. heck.. I give up... I don't agree with this anyway. What he is saying is that all the religions in the world right now are false and when the true religion comes the people of the world will follow.

Answer 7

I would eliminate using "you" (such as in the first sentence) and using contractions, because the informality of either one contradicts the formality of the rest of the writing. Also, sentences and phrases should not begin with "it." You could resconstruct the first sentence to read
"One would be misled in suggesting that beliefs can be based on half-truths alone." (or something to that effect)

Answer 8

my head hurts now