GRACE IN DEATH
Sadness engulfs me,
cloaks my soul in velvet darkness.
My melancholy as keen as the dagger plunged through my heart by your hand.
Red blood escapes from its pumping prison,
Sealing my fate.
My eyes linger on your beautiful face,
Made twisted by your boundless hate.
Blackness encroaches my vision,
Lining it with the cruel reality of death.
As my last breath escapes my cold lungs,
I can't resist one last, seemingly prophetic remark.
"See you in hell."
2006-10-30 10:49:58 · 10 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
amazing the anger and sorrow really comes out, great poem yea it sounds a little depressing but look at mine they are even depressing sometimes too but i love how you really show all of the emotion and shocking imagery
2006-10-30 10:59:46 · answer #1 · answered by golfer chic 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Self indulgent, solipistic and emo. Its no different then any of the other hundred thousand million billion poems on myspace or web journals by teenagers who have a downright decent life but are still depressed because they don't know what it means to starve.
2006-10-30 19:25:01 · answer #2 · answered by Jaynus of Sinope 1 · 0⤊ 1⤋
I love your poems... they are so dark yet something seductive about them... don't ask me to explain that... :)...I love all the decriptive wording... it's like u can almost picture it...like a scene happening before your eyes. Keep doing what your doing...
2006-11-01 22:16:04 · answer #3 · answered by Maggz 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think that it has no real depth it is just about death and blood and sorrow....but if you wanted to improve the poem you could add metaphors and give it an internal rhyme or two
2006-10-30 19:02:28 · answer #4 · answered by Chris 1 · 0⤊ 1⤋
I like it, dark, deep but has a very poignant message. Two thumbs UP!!
2006-10-30 18:53:37 · answer #5 · answered by T-Bird 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think this poem so dark and sad. I don't like the poem, but I like the poetry of it. Did you write it?
2006-10-30 18:52:54 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very nice. I really like it. So dark and full of feeling.
2006-10-30 19:07:03 · answer #7 · answered by avari 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Very dark and morbid. Reads very well. I would love it if I liked dark and morbid.
2006-10-30 18:56:01 · answer #8 · answered by jakethekarr 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very dark, but well written. Good job.
2006-10-30 18:55:40 · answer #9 · answered by zucchero81 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Really sad and morbid. I hope you really don't feel that way.
2006-10-30 18:52:51 · answer #10 · answered by Starla_C 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋