365 days have come and gone
still we're here without you
and it just feels so wrong.
it's like we're living in 2 worlds
here on earth, alone
and with you in heaven, that's home.
but we don't know how to get there just yet
because i guess our time's not through
just know that when we can
we'll find our way to you.
and tho we cried and couldn't understand
when the angels came for you
we soon found peace in god's promised plan
for the heaven he had in store for you.
see, god couldn't wait to take you home
to show you everything
you'd never known.
to watch you run
on streets of gold
to see you marvel
at things untold.
to watch you
sing, and laugh, and play
yes, god chose that special day.
and when OUR time is finished
and through;
just watch--
we'll be smiling as god brings us home,
To You.....
2006-10-30 05:02:04 · 8 answers · asked by lifeistough_period 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Visual Arts ➔ Other - Visual Arts
i wrote it for my brother, who died a year ago when he was 19
2006-10-30 05:05:20 · update #1
I think that your poem is heartfelt and put together very well.It doesn't matter that you are 17, however, for 17 you seem to have experienced alot of heartache and that is very sad. Or you are one of those people that can just down and write something down and the words just flow. If that is the case, you should get a job printing greeting cards as some people are not that fortunate to be able to write down what they think so easily.
2006-10-30 05:09:18 · answer #1 · answered by Sharon R 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Is a very good work, very nice and beautiful poem, you've got talent. Sorry about your brother
2006-10-30 13:10:22 · answer #2 · answered by fireangel 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I'm definitly not a poetry fan, but I can honestly say that it is as good as anything else I've ever seen.
2006-10-30 13:07:29 · answer #3 · answered by Wocka wocka 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
that is a very lovely poem, you were obviously close to the person that you write about in this poem...once again very lovely and heartfelt...take care
2006-10-30 13:07:39 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
beautiful, I`m a young guy and i really proud of the way you write, congratulation, such a nice poem!, bye.
2006-10-30 13:09:58 · answer #5 · answered by jbonetty 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it's awesome exspecially when you mentioned two worlds earth and heaven
2006-10-30 13:06:33 · answer #6 · answered by punkrock_dude_4u07 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
wonderful! lovely! you have a bright future ahead of you! keep it up!
2006-10-30 13:05:43 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
i think ur poem is lovely, but it would hav been better if u made use of rymes .
2006-10-30 13:13:00 · answer #8 · answered by sexy 1 · 0⤊ 2⤋