Are there any mistakes in this paragraph?

Question

A crow was sitting on a branch of a tree with a piece of cheese in her beak. A fox who had been watching her set his mind on getting the cheese through trickery. Standing under the tree he looked up and said, "What a fine bird I see above me! Her beauty is without equal. If only her voice is as sweet as her looks are fair, she ought without doubt to be Queen of the Birds." The Crow was flattered by his words, and to show the Fox that she could sing she gave a loud caw. Down came the cheese and the Fox, snatching it up, said, "You have a voice, madam, I see: what you want is wits." Like Aesop’s famous fable about the slyness of the fox, the Odyssey also showcases a trait the ancient Greeks revered above everything else- craftiness. Odysseus, a “man of twists and turns” (1.1), is the epitome of this quality. Although Odysseus is legendary for his extraordinary strength, he relies much more on his quick mind than muscle, a tendency that his encounters prove.

Answer 1

You should change one thing. Where it says Down came the cheese and the Fox, snatching it up

Should be Down came the cheese, the fox snatching it up

And the second sentence should read A fox, who had been watching her, set his mind on getting the cheese through trickery.

Otherwise it looks good.

Hope you get an A on that one.

Answer 2

There is no serious error at all. Only a few punctuation errors and an article error.


A crow was sitting on a branch of a tree with a piece of cheese in her beak. A fox, who had been watching her, set his mind on getting the cheese through trickery. Standing under the tree he looked up and said, "What a fine bird I see above me! Her beauty is without equal. If only her voice is as sweet as her looks are fair, she ought without doubt to be The Queen of Birds." The Crow was flattered by his words, and to show the Fox that she could sing, she gave a loud caw. Down came the cheese and the Fox, snatching it up, said, "You have a voice, madam, I see: what you want is wits." Like Aesop’s famous fable about the slyness of the fox, the Odyssey also showcases a trait the ancient Greeks revered above everything else- craftiness. Odysseus, a “man of twists and turns” (1.1), is the epitome of this quality. Although Odysseus is legendary for his extraordinary strength, he relies much more on his quick mind than muscle, a tendency that his encounters prove.

Answer 3

I try fixing it for your hopefully it helps you good luck!! By they way is a great essay it was only a comma that it needed but the paragraph is great!


A crow was sitting on a branch of a tree with a piece of cheese in her beak. A fox, who had been watching her, set his mind on getting the cheese through trickery. Standing under the tree he looked up and said, "What a fine bird I see above me! Her beauty is without equal. If only her voice is as sweet as her looks are fair, she ought without doubt to be Queen of the Birds." The Crow was flattered by his words, and to show the Fox that she could sing she gave a loud caw. Down came the cheese and the Fox, snatching it up, said, "You have a voice, madam, I see: what you want is wits." Like Aesop’s famous fable about the slyness of the fox, the Odyssey also showcases a trait the ancient Greeks revered above everything else- craftiness. Odysseus, a “man of twists and turns” (1.1), is the epitome of this quality. Although Odysseus is legendary for his extraordinary strength, he relies much more on his quick mind than muscle, a tendency that his encounters prove.

Answer 4

I think you might want to change, "Down came the cheese and the Fox" to "Down came the cheese, and the Fox" - otherwise it sounds as if the fox is coming down too.

I would also drop the words "showcases," and change "the epitome of this quality" to "the epitome of this."

Also, "he relies much more on his quick mind than muscle, a tendency that his encounters prove," would sound better as, "his encounters prove he relies much more on his quick mind."

Though I admit, only the comma is really needed. The rest is nit-picky readability. Still, I have given out higher grades for papers that had a tighter word choice.

Answer 5

First, this should be more than one paragraph - Break between caw. and before Down then again after wits and before Like.
Fix she ought to, without doubt
In the passage sometimes fox is capitalized and sometimes not - I believe it showed be all lower case since it is not a proper name.The same with crow.
There is only an end quote with Queen of the Birds.
after see it should be a semi-colon, not a colon.
And a colon after else:craftiness.

Those are all I see.

Answer 6

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Answer 7

Nope. I checked it on word, I read it, and I let my parents read it. No problems!

Answer 8

i think that you should start a new paragraph at the point of "like aesop's....

Answer 9

Who am I to judge, you are happy so I am happy -then it is all right

Answer 10

as if im gonna sit there and read for mistakes!ha ha not