How do you like this poem (I'm the author)?

Question

"Fighting Dragons"


For fighting the fate
I need to be brave
Gathering courage for
Hunting all
The dragons of our time.
In our dreams
No dragons must appear,
Go chase them out of our world.

Dreaming of dragons
Remembering good times
As a legend that still shines
Gather all your force to fight
Or get the help of a brave knight.
No one must ever destroy our dreams
So keep on fighting the dragons.

Answer 1

Keep writing!

I don't want to discourage you (I'm a writer, artists and designer my self), but poetry is supposed to be multidimensional, complex and sophisticated in its deep communicative layers of expression, yet simultaneously, simple and economic in its delivery, having a rhythmic flow with continuity. It is metaphorical and allegorical, painting rich colorful and lustrous images that leap from the page and splash across the mental canopy of the bewildered recipient. The only way to gain this expertise is to read with an insatiable and unquenchable appetite and write again, and again, over and over, never ceasing, never being completely satisfied with your work, never giving in to mediocrity.

I highly recommend that a very good thesaurus and dictionary be apart of your constant craving for words and apart of your daily reading regiment, enveloping yourself in these tools.

With that said, the concept behind your poem is a good metaphor, now I'd like to see you develop it further, making it richer, succulent, where each singular tiny word is critically meaningful and significant without any sparing words.

Good luck, and keep writing!

Answer 2

I actually like dragons and in this they are the bad guys. I don't like that. Not much form to this either.

Answer 3

overall grade-D
Too simplistic, uneven cadence, poor imagery, poor descriptive style.