HAVEN
Right on the corner
Of a busy crossway
A homeless man
Was playing a flute
While I was resting
On the garden bench
The sweet sound of music
Carrying a melody phrase
Sought refuge in my ears
And snuggled in my heart
Composed by Rishikaysh
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2006-10-28 05:04:52 · 12 answers · asked by ricci 3 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
sweet...
2006-10-28 05:07:34 · answer #1 · answered by smiley_1 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
For me a poem has to have rhythm. It doesn't necessarily have to rhyme but it needs to hit my emotions. I think clarity of expression is important as well. I don't like to second guess what I'm reading about. I always look for what I term "poetic gems"in the text.
2016-05-22 03:09:08 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Well, to be honest, I believe Poems have to tell stories to be good ones. I think you were on the right track but it doesn't really make all that much sense. But you are on your way to be a great writer!
2006-10-28 05:08:53 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
wow !!! that touched me!!! you are shuch a good writer!!! if i could write like that, then i would be publiching my poems in the news paper or somethin i mean not all people will like every thing you put out there but i can bet that over 1/3 of the population that reads it will like it!!
2006-10-28 05:36:38 · answer #4 · answered by VerysmartBlonde01 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it
2006-10-28 05:07:26 · answer #5 · answered by mexchick316 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
still needs some work...but it's a good start...good feeling and visuals.
2006-10-28 05:10:30 · answer #6 · answered by ULTIMATEMEANING 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
My God, that was beautiful...you need to get more into a collection and get them published.....wonderful........may I have your permission to keep this in my folder?
2006-10-28 05:09:40 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
keep trying
2006-10-28 05:29:08 · answer #8 · answered by bernice l 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
hmmm
2006-10-28 05:06:21 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
it sounds incomplete
2006-10-28 05:07:41 · answer #10 · answered by rkgiraffe 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's okay... Not that meaningful though.... to me that is...
2006-10-28 05:13:24 · answer #11 · answered by Sapph 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋