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The Effect of Information Technology Applied to Preschool

With the rapid growth of the information technology, the usage of computer technology and Internet is used more common in the preschool as well as at home. The application of integration of information technology into preschool classroom can be carried out in form of multimedia information. Computers may be used to support student learning When applying information technology into the early childhood classroom learning environment some factors should be considered. Teacher’s knowledge about the technology, software, the way the software used and creating an appropriate environment, Parents’ support in the home. Can computer usage benefit, no effect or detrimental to the child’s personal growth. What kind of guidelines should apply to technology within the early childhood curriculum? Can computer usage can help children develop better social relationships with peers? (Jones & Selby, 1997).

The purpose of this study is to explore the issues of applying information technology to early childhood education in Taiwan and Australia. The effects of the integration of information technology applied in preschool will be evaluated to look into the outcomes of learning attitude and achievement in preschool. Experiments will be taken setting students of preschool as research object; gives courses to two groups, one is the group integrated with information technology and the other is the traditional group. Research tools such achievement test as well as questionnaire of attitude are used to explore the following aspects.
1. What kind of information technology is suitable to be used ?
2. Children’s cognitive and social abilities
3. The influence on child development
4. Teacher’s knowledge about the technology, software and the way to create a proper environment
5. The relationship among children, teacher and parents after applied information technology
6. The influence on learning attitude and achievement on different teaching methods and ability level

The appropriate use of information technology has many implications for early childhood professional development. I have studied computer programming at Woman College of Technology in Leeds England, and I have been working in the early childhood education for several years. Therefore, I have sound background on information technology and early childhood education. I hope this study can find some guidelines about the way to apply information technology to preschool and how to make children, teacher and parents work together to create a appropriate environment so children can have better achievement and social abilities on their development

Answer 1

With the rapid growth of information technology, the use of computer technology and the Internet is becoming more common in preschool as well as at home. The application of integration of information technology into the preschool classroom can be carried out in the form of multimedia information. Computers may be used to support student learning. When applying information technology into the early childhood learning environment some factors should be considered. A teacher’s knowledge about the technology, software, the way the software is used, and creating an appropriate environment. Parents’ support in the home is also a factor. Can computer usage benefit, cause no effect or be detrimental to the child’s personal growth? What kind of guidelines should be applied to technology within the early childhood curriculum? Can computer usage help children develop better social relationships with peers? (Jones & Selby, 1997).

The purpose of this study is to explore the issues of applying information technology to early childhood education in Taiwan and Australia. The effects of the integration of information technology applied in preschool will be evaluated to look into the outcomes of learning attitude and achievement in preschool. Experiments will be taken setting students of preschool age as research objects; giving courses to two groups, one group integrated with information technology and the other being the traditional group. Research tools such as achievement tests as well as a questionnaire of attitude are used to explore the following aspects;
1. What kind of information technology is suitable?
2. Children’s cognitive and social abilities
3. The influence on child development
4. Teacher’s knowledge about the technology, software and the way to create a proper environment
5. The relationship among children, teacher and parents after applied information technology
6. The influence on learning attitude and achievement on different teaching methods and ability level

The appropriate use of information technology has many implications for early childhood professional development. I have studied computer programming at Woman College of Technology in Leeds England, and I have been working in the early childhood education for several years. Therefore, I have a sound background in information technology and early childhood education. I hope this study can find some guidelines about the way to apply information technology to preschool and how to make children, teachers and parents work together to create an appropriate environment so children can increase their achievement and social abilities in their development


I think thats right now....

Answer 2

There's some grammatical issues here, even carrying over into some of the corrections.

"Teacher’s knowledge about the technology, software, the way the software used and creating an appropriate environment, Parents’ support in the home. " is a sentence fragment, and needs revision. You could potentially lead into this list with a semicolon or an em dash.

You have to define information technology. Any solid written piece, especially of the persuasive type, is going to define all the terms it uses, especially when vagueness is present. By defining your ambiguous terms you set constraints and aid your reader in comprehending your goals, and how and where you intend them to be used.

There are a lot of grammatical mistakes that have been mostly covered by previous examples. I'd suggest there is a deeper problem that fixing the grammar will not correct. I'd review your thesis and see if your supporting material is placed properly around it. Inform your reader what the current situation is, what the problem is, suggest your solution, and then expand on it in the paper.

Good luck!

Answer 3

Too many elementary mistakes in English and connective ommissions. Take a sentence at a time and correct the syntax.

Answer 4

sorry dude,its quite long.i dont think there are any mistakes except for some fullstops,comma and ?.

Answer 5

Are you winding us up with this request?

Answer 6

yes thats correct well done.