People like to avoid the danger, the pain, the mess, the traffic, and ofcoasre the tension of going to the games or events.
or
People like to avoid danger, pain, mess, traffic, and of course the tension of going to the games or events.
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2006-10-27 19:30:45 · 12 answers · asked by ali_ed2001 2 in Education & Reference ➔ Homework Help
By reversing I believe they mean something like the following:
When attending a game, people like to avoid the danger, the pain, the mess, the traffic and, of course, the tension of the event itself.
The "of going" portion would be redundant as you already commented on the traffic and mess...
2006-10-27 19:39:19 · answer #1 · answered by Dez 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Whenever making a list all of the items in the list must have the same format. In this case the first one is the most correct(although you have a spelling error.) The article "the," should be in front of all of your subjects if you are going to use it at all. In the first sentence it is correctly used in front of all the subjects. In the second sentence you used it only in front of tension, throwing off the format of the list. You could say:
People like to avoid the danger, the pain, the mess, the traffic, and, of course, the tension when going to games or events.
or
People like to avoid danger, pain, mess, traffic, and, of course, tension when going to games or events.
2006-10-27 20:07:50 · answer #2 · answered by Bethany D 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Check this:
People like to avoid danger, pain, mess, traffic and of course, the tension of going to the games or events.
2006-10-27 19:43:21 · answer #3 · answered by Dream♥Girl 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
People like to avoid danger, pain, mess, traffic, and, of course, the tension of going to the games or events.
Add a few more commas, and next time, try reducing the amount of the things you list. If you do try to list things, use a : (a colon). You should using a few (i.e. danger, pain, and tension) then try incorporating the other things (mess, traffic) in another sentence. Like you can use "mess" when you talk about traffic.
2006-10-27 19:41:40 · answer #4 · answered by smart_e_pants 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
People like to avoid the danger, the pain, mess, traffic and, of course, the tension of going to the games or events.
Spellcheckers are wonderful things; grammar checkers not so much.
2006-10-27 19:34:33 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
People LIKES to avoid danger, pain, mess, traffic, and of course the tension of going to the games or events.
People- can be plural or singular (as FOOD)
2006-10-27 19:46:43 · answer #6 · answered by Flory M 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
The 1st one because we're mentioning which danger, pain, mess, traffic & tension this is (I mean we know that the danger, pain, mess, traffic & tension is of going to the games ) So this has to be the 1st one!!!
GOOD LUCK!!!
2006-10-27 22:00:10 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's actually a messy sentence all together. Consider just saying the "tension."
2006-10-27 19:33:31 · answer #8 · answered by Lynda M ♥ 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Neither is wrong really. You could use either. The first one some I guess would say using the so much is repetitive but i think it gives it more description? I like the first one better :)
2006-10-27 19:33:21 · answer #9 · answered by lilgngstr24 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Trust me, the second one is correct. Altough you could add a comma after course.
2006-10-27 19:34:18 · answer #10 · answered by 1 Sailor 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋