I am the all purpose glue between,
Two broken pieces of wood.
That once were stuck so firm together,
But were broken in the wind.
After each fight they ask themselves,
Why are they stuck together for?
They search for love that's forever gone,
In the end it comes down to me.
I was meant to explore the world,
And find my destiny.
I cannott for I'm stuck between,
Tho pieces that should be apart.
Each time I hear one of you cry,
I feel I'm behind your tears.
How could you give such guilt and pain,
To your flesh and blood, your child.
2006-10-27 11:15:19 · 9 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
It definitely needs some editing. Ex. "Why are they stuck together for?"
2006-10-27 12:11:10 · answer #1 · answered by dkrusekontrol 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
this is not a poem......your reference to all purpose glue and two pieces of wood are poor metaphors that readers cannot, do not, identify with....how does one identify with being all purpose glue? first you try to emote essence through glue, then you switch your identifying point of view to the pieces of wood. This piecing together of random words lack cohesion, depth, meaning, emotion and essence. It lacks poetic rhythm (cadence) as well. sorry but, realistically, I must give it a D-
2006-10-27 19:30:44 · answer #2 · answered by Pie's_Guy 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
this is a great poem and i know what u mean i'm stuck in the middle 2 but i have to aways cry myself 2 sleep or i wont sleep at all i know what its like i'm constantly awakend by yellin and screaming and its a hard thing to deal with so there4 i do what u do and write about it
2006-10-28 04:46:53 · answer #3 · answered by aunye b 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
u can get
6.5 to 8 out of 10
2006-10-27 18:12:20 · answer #4 · answered by Well Wisher 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
How very sad what some parents do to their children. It's so good that you are writing, it's a healthy outlet, and you express yourself well.
2006-10-27 13:33:12 · answer #5 · answered by Ceajae 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
I like it
although I enjoy every kind of peotry!!!!
I could never write it though...
2006-10-27 11:23:11 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
thats beautiful! Are your parents divorced? Mine are, I know how you feel! Wow, that is very good!
2006-10-27 11:21:16 · answer #7 · answered by briezy 1 · 0⤊ 1⤋
It was great i liked it so it does not care if it stunk or not it only cares if you like it
2006-10-27 11:43:22 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
not very good
2006-10-27 11:17:48 · answer #9 · answered by Alex G 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋