Soccer
Soccer is my favorite sport.
You play outside on natural fodder
Rather than a common concrete court indoors.
The crowd screams louder,
As the goalie leaps across the net like a deer
And knocks the ball out of contention.
The stadium erupts and the crowd joyfully cheers.
The game is over and so is the tension.
please leave me some feedback too!
2006-10-26 12:23:54 · 9 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
give me constructive critisism
just cuz u give me a 10 it doesnt mean im gonna give u ten points i appreciate honesty
2006-10-26 12:28:16 · update #1
give me constructive critisism
just cuz u give me a 10 it doesnt mean im gonna give u ten points i appreciate honesty
2006-10-26 12:28:19 · update #2
9
the "common concrete court" is a little too much alliteration for me, but pretty good.
2006-10-26 12:27:53 · answer #1 · answered by tapping toes 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
7
2006-10-26 12:27:09 · answer #2 · answered by - Allison 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I hate soccer a but I like poetry so if you can mix the two and make me understand why people go crazy in the stadium screaming and yelling, and sometimes hurting and killing eachother like in Italy happen, then ....thanks.
I give you 7 for the effort .... keep on.
2006-10-26 12:37:32 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
I give it a 7. It seems like you're really passionate about soccer.
2006-10-26 12:26:00 · answer #4 · answered by Nico 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
ima say an 8 i dont know much about soccer, but you seem to like it a lot.
2006-10-26 12:28:03 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
for your love of the game which shows clearly in your words, I rate it a 7, you put alot of yourself in this
2006-10-26 12:28:25 · answer #6 · answered by ? 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I give it a 8. That is really good. I like it.
2006-10-26 16:27:33 · answer #7 · answered by ▒Яenée▒ 7 · 0⤊ 1⤋
4-5 kinda boring, make it more exciting
2006-10-26 12:25:52 · answer #8 · answered by btamlind 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
10!!!!!
awesome
2006-10-26 12:27:10 · answer #9 · answered by Sociopath 6 · 0⤊ 1⤋