title:waterfall
Sitting by a water fall
how peaceful and sound.
It's the perfect place
to sit around.
i step into the water,
but the current is strong.
Peaceful it sounds,
but strong all along.
So maybe i'll wait till
i calm down, and
i'll just have a look
at nature for now.
2006-10-26 03:46:59 · 14 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
THAT is beautiful. You cannot do ny better than you are at THIS moment. it is peaceful, loving and calm....on a scale...and I really do not like rating writings as I too write i do give it a 10...and tht is easy.....I would rather give it 1000. it is wonderful!
2006-10-26 03:51:50 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
I'd give it a 3 but only because there is no real reason to why the waterfall is there it does not represent the soul of the artist. Though pretty and flowing there is no real soul to the poem.
2006-10-26 10:49:51 · answer #2 · answered by Jessica 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I give you a four. You need to put more heart into it. Rhyming got you three points only. The extra point is for perseverance.
2006-10-26 10:58:16 · answer #3 · answered by The One Truth 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's getting there...but you're mixing poetic phrases with too commonplace phrases...example: "peaceful and sound" clashes with "sit around"...make sense? Anyway I give it a 5. :)
2006-10-26 10:50:14 · answer #4 · answered by peachy78 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I rate this a (3) It needs a little more insight.
2006-10-26 10:49:03 · answer #5 · answered by Kendra J 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sorry, quite amateurish in my view. Maybe a 3. Keep trying, it is the only way you will improve! :-)
2006-10-26 10:49:52 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Amber (and Matt or Matt)
Keep going, you off to a good start.
2006-10-26 10:49:31 · answer #7 · answered by Oh, I see 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yes ur, I'll give you 8
2006-10-26 10:51:53 · answer #8 · answered by sunshine 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It was nice. I give it an 8 at least. good luck.
2006-10-26 10:49:25 · answer #9 · answered by Ginnykitty 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
very insightful, i'll give a 7
2006-10-26 10:48:30 · answer #10 · answered by Mr. Takafushi 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋