My saviour lives on other's deaths,
For him to take to hell.
My loyalty to my saviour,
Led me to suicide.
The cross flew in and saved mankind,
From faith to their dead God.
I was the man nailed to the cross,
The sacrifice for better things.
And every man that flew with me,
Came down with me that day,
For none of them were free from sin,
Their ticket to where they belong.
Before you true evils win your fight,
Against your natural sins.
Let him accept you as you are,
For as yourself, he won't let you die.
2006-10-24 09:40:40 · 11 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
not bad
2006-10-24 09:42:42 · answer #1 · answered by Stevie F 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Good but sorta depressing..for some reason I had a hard time interpreting what you were trying to say...which is usually not the case with me because I'm really good at writing poetry!
2006-10-24 16:44:11 · answer #2 · answered by Lina 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
hummm the first parts sounds like your savior is statan, the second the second is kinda of hard to follow i think it needs a little work so people will understand your meanining better, the last part reads like a warining of somekinds i am not sure what you are trying to say
2006-10-24 16:47:37 · answer #3 · answered by ? 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Confusing - - the first paragragh I would have call you an atheist...
But then it turns as if JESUS saved you from death...
Then it speaks as if you are JESUS, GOD, CHRIST, THE HOLY SPIRIT...
Then the first two lines of the last paragraph throw me off again and the last two lines...
Like I said confusing...
2006-10-24 16:56:07 · answer #4 · answered by mentalchallenge 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It is great if your into gay poetry. Get a real hobby. Start baking cakes like the rest of us guys.
2006-10-24 16:42:22 · answer #5 · answered by Husker 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Deep but depressing.....it good but for your mental health write some happy one too.
2006-10-24 16:49:24 · answer #6 · answered by Lovely B 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
it's scary. I think you need to seek professional help immediately!
2006-10-24 16:49:27 · answer #7 · answered by lucia 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Freddie Murcury,
Don't quit your day job.
TDCWH
2006-10-24 16:55:56 · answer #8 · answered by TDCWH 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
call dr.phil or 911
2006-10-24 16:42:18 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
Blastphemy!!!!!!! jk uh well,...........kinda athiest dont you think?
I mean it is good if you think but my oppinion is no, sorry. :(
2006-10-24 16:53:29 · answer #10 · answered by bittykittietwinklepie 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋