how to make the text look better in english. i thinkthere are too many "take place". i think i'd better combine the sentences and make the text shorter. thanks a lot for your help
The parties have taken place in Berlin for the fourteenth time. They take place every three years. The x company has participated in the parties for the third time and, and like in the past, its stand raised a lot of interest among the guests.
2006-10-24 01:05:36 · 9 answers · asked by AsMa 1 in Education & Reference ➔ Teaching
The parties have taken place in Berlin for the fourteenth time, and do so every three years. The x company has participated in the parties for the third time and, and like in the past, its stand raised a lot of interest among the guests.
2006-10-24 01:07:25 · answer #1 · answered by nikki 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
This is the fourteenth of these parties in Berlin, which take place every three years. This is the third time that X company is participating, and as in the past, its stand generated a lot of interest among the guests.
2006-10-24 09:18:36 · answer #2 · answered by Orla C 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Nikki's is close, but 'The parties have taken place for the fourteenth time' is incorrect use of tense. The party can only take place for the fourteenth time on one specific occasion, and the sentence infers that it has done so already, so 'have taken' is not correct. It is also ambiguous, from your original, whether there is just one party at any one time, or several as the plural actually suggests that there is more than one carrying on at the same time. My suggestion is based on the premise that there is only actually one party held every three years. You could also remover the whole second sentence and replace it with one word. Suggest the following. 'The triannual party in Berlin took place for the fourteenth time. The x company participated in the event for the third time and, as on past occasions, its stand raised a lot of interest among the guests.'
One final point - the above suggestion, and your original also implies the party is always held in Berlin. If that is not the case, a bit of tweaking will be required.
2006-10-24 08:31:00 · answer #3 · answered by eriverpipe 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
The parties, which occur every three years, were held in Berlin for the fourteenth time. The x company has participated in the parties for the third time and, as in the past, its stand has raised a lot of interest among the guests.
2006-10-24 08:37:13 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
The parties which are organised every three years.,were held for the fourteenth time in Berlin. Same as before, the x company which has participated for the third time in the parties, has attracted a lot of guests.
2006-10-25 08:17:56 · answer #5 · answered by dagstakila 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
There are a number of 'link words' and 'phrases' that can be used to make this read better together with rearranging the words......
'The parties USUALLY take place in Berlin every three years AND have SO FAR BEEN HELD ON fourteen OCCASIONS. TO DATE the Company, X, has taken part in these parties three times now, AND ON EACH OCCASION its' stand has raised a lot of interest AMONGST ATTENDING guests'......
Hope this helps
2006-10-25 08:12:57 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
i would say~:
the parties which take place every 3 years were in Berlin for the 14 time
2006-10-24 08:18:17 · answer #7 · answered by zargonius 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I'm an English teacher. Nikki's sounds good to me.
2006-10-24 08:14:31 · answer #8 · answered by ♥♥♥ Mommy to Two ♥♥♥ 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i agree with nikki
2006-10-24 08:13:33 · answer #9 · answered by jazzy_jada02 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋