What do you think of this ending to my short story?

Question

You can read the story here >>> http://anyamariaromero.livejournal.com/

I'm a little worried about the ending. Should I leave it or change it? If I change it, what should I change?

Much love,
Genevive

Answer 1

I would say that after all the mental effort that you have given the story that letting it end as only a dream seems like an escape from going that extra step and making it real.

Answer 2

Your ending is cliche; the use of the dream sequence is so over done. Also, the choice of words in the last paragraph/ending makes it seem childish and makes your writing seem immature.