It's part of a history essay. It just seems like my sentences are too long, and I don't know how to organize it and make it flow easier.
The colonists believed also that when their government fails them, or fails to provide security of their rights, the same people who gave them the right to govern should also have the ability to take that right away or change its parameters so that the government will “build its foundation on such principles”. The colonists felt that long standing governments should not be changed for petty reasons; however, when there is a long series of abuses of authoritative power, to the point that the government tries to reduce a society’s human rights, then it becomes the “duty” of the governed to overthrow such a government.
2006-10-23 17:52:44 · 9 answers · asked by Anonymous in Education & Reference ➔ Words & Wordplay
*yawn*
Sounds good, mate.
2006-10-23 17:55:35 · answer #1 · answered by denh 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Ok here goes nothing, and you get what you pay for.. :)
The colonists believed that when their government fails to protect them or their rights, they should have the ability to change the government to better meet their needs. They felt that government should be built on the principles of serving and protecting its citizens. Colonists felt that changes should only be made in clear cases of abuse of power, and not without serious consideration. When the authority of government interferes with the basic human rights of society it becomes the duty of the citizens to overthrow it, and reshape it to better fit the original design.
2006-10-24 01:08:17 · answer #2 · answered by dantheman_028 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You don't have a problem with the length of the sentences ("run-ons" are not just long sentences, FYI, people, they're when you forget to put a punctuation mark in between two separate sentences). I see one small thing: you should add a to in front of change in the first sentence ("...ability to take that right away or to change..."). You ought not to put quotation marks around something unless you are citing a reference (e.g. "duty" in the second sentence). Everything else sounds great.
Complexity like this makes writing sound intelligent and well-researched (which is the main point, isn't it?). If someone can't seem to keep up with your level, that's their problem. (Although there is a line between writing that is eloquent and writing that just plain won't shut up.)
2006-10-24 01:36:48 · answer #3 · answered by supensa 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
The colonists believed that the government owe it's legitimity from the people who elected them. They felt that if the government would abuse it's powers over the citizens then it would be the people's duty to overthrow the government.
2006-10-24 01:04:36 · answer #4 · answered by Joseph Binette 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Ya know, I gave it a shot, but those words were so convoluted and without seeing the entire essay, it seemed pointless to try to rearrange those few words. Far more trouble than the two points awarded here. Sorry.
2006-10-24 01:25:14 · answer #5 · answered by Mia 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
THE COLONIST ALSO BELIEVED THAT WEN THE GOV'T FAILS THEM OR FAILS THE PROTECTION OF THEIR RIGHTS, THEN THE PEOPLE WHO GAVE THE THEIR POWER SHOULD BE ALLOWED TO REVOKE IT. OR" ........" LAST PART IS OK EXCEPT FOR RUN ON SENTENCES
2006-10-24 01:02:24 · answer #6 · answered by Veronica 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
uh it's great but...... the first sentence is kind of confusing and u should make it apart instead of go on sentence.
2006-10-24 00:58:48 · answer #7 · answered by thenuyy 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
hehehe
i duno..
2006-10-24 01:01:44 · answer #8 · answered by akoaypilipino 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
MYOB FOR SHORT (MIND YOUR OWN BUSINESS)
2006-10-24 00:56:51 · answer #9 · answered by cork 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋