Okay its not finished but anywayz i love writing songs and its a hobby..I want to know your opinion on this one..
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Verse 1:
My head's been going insane
Ever since you've been with her
Broken down with all this pain
You're only pushing me farther
Verse 2:
Maybe this is for the best
And now are you listening?
Now this isn't just a test
Say anything, anything
Chorus:
Please tell me ... Please tell me
What you're expecting of me
I've had a hard time, very hard time
So can you see, I can't be...
Verse 3:
It's been a long time since
Since I last heard your voice
I wish you'd give me a chance
To show you what's beyond your choice
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thats all i have right now but anywayz....opinions?feedback?d... it suck or is it good??
2006-10-23 12:52:12 · 14 answers · asked by Kelsey's Mommy<3 4 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Other - Entertainment
IT WOULD BE A ROCK TYPE SONG..lolz sorry i forgot to add that...lolz
2006-10-23 12:54:55 · update #1
G'day mestbaby16,
Thank you for your question.
It needs a bit of work but it definitely has potential. You might to try writing music for it or find someone who can because you definitely have a talent as a songwriter.
Good luck with your career.
Regards
2006-10-23 12:57:11 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
out of all the lyrics i had to read or is really good but it might not sound so good if u dont find the right beat to gao with it if u do find a good beat put it out there and let the world listen so good luck with ur music writing
2006-10-23 13:03:48 · answer #2 · answered by that wheelchair guy 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's good enough as a start. As someone said, find a composer or singer and get stuck in.
2014-01-23 01:31:45 · answer #3 · answered by nswritie 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
so far i love it. Maybe put in there some things describing how your heart is breaking.
Ex. My heart is shattering like a picture dropped.
Or something like that.
2006-10-23 12:55:59 · answer #4 · answered by Mandi B 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
it comes off more like a poem then a song keep trying don't give up if that your dream
2006-10-23 12:57:32 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
REally good, expecially if it's rock. Haha maybe i can paly the guitar for it.lol.....ahh me.....
2006-10-23 15:24:56 · answer #6 · answered by Classic Rocker 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
well.....with the third verse....idk if you should keep the last line maybe you should change it up a little...just my opinion is all.
2006-10-23 12:56:36 · answer #7 · answered by Quan S 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
they rock, i write lyrics alot too, heres my email, maybe we can share =) theblondewolf99@yahoo.com
2006-10-23 12:57:42 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
personally it looks good but it also depends on how it will sound,
2006-10-23 12:54:11 · answer #9 · answered by Patrick Teh III 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i dont think its bad- actually i really like it- just get a tune and then itll be really good- GOOD LUCK!!!!!!!!!
2006-10-23 13:00:52 · answer #10 · answered by cayla_152 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋