Okay its not finished but anywayz i love writing songs and its a hobby..I want to know your opinion on this one..
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Verse 1:
My head's been going insane
Ever since you've been with her
Broken down with all this pain
You're only pushing me farther
Verse 2:
Maybe this is for the best
And now are you listening?
Now this isn't just a test
Say anything, anything
Chorus:
Please tell me ... Please tell me
What you're expecting of me
I've had a hard time, very hard time
So can you see, I can't be...
Verse 3:
It's been a long time since
Since I last heard your voice
I wish you'd give me a chance
To show you what's beyond your choice
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thats all i have right now but anywayz....opinions?feedback?does it suck or is it good??
2006-10-23 12:47:53 · 24 answers · asked by Kelsey's Mommy<3 4 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Music
P.S. it would probably be a rock type song...
2006-10-23 12:49:47 · update #1
I liked it. ur on a roll
2006-10-23 12:49:51 · answer #1 · answered by jEsSiCa 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
WELL--- I can't really give you the "whole" opinion regarding your song because I can't hear the rhythm of this song. Remember that rhythm makes lot of difference in a song. You do have good lyrics though; teenagers mostly will like this kind of song because it is very easy to memorize (which is good).
Keep it up!!!! =) Good luck!!!!
2006-10-23 12:53:34 · answer #2 · answered by L!LO 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This is just my opinion, but your song is kinda of typical, I don't mean to put is down it's just my opinion that good songs are like good poems they shouldn't reveal themselves right away. A good song should make someone go huh? what is this song about? and then they want to figure it out and when they do they are happy with what they have found (or think they have found) but this is just my opinion
2006-10-23 19:16:11 · answer #3 · answered by Ben V 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Hmm its good,but maybe you can spice it up a little,u know u said it wud be a rocka type of song. There are some words best fit on that,but its really up to you. Wish to hear it when its done hehe
2006-10-23 12:59:28 · answer #4 · answered by Lo Carla 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think it is a good song really dont think i am just saying that it it good i like verse 3 the best!!
2006-10-23 12:52:47 · answer #5 · answered by katie g 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think it sounds like it'd be a great song if it had the right rhythm & music with it. I wish you all the luck in the world with your passion for this, God bless you!
2006-10-23 13:31:24 · answer #6 · answered by ~*Lady Beth*~ 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Well, it could use some work, but for the most part, it's good. Though it would really depend on what type of rock you're referring to.
2006-10-23 12:52:03 · answer #7 · answered by ldnester 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sounds like a blues song.
2006-10-23 12:54:00 · answer #8 · answered by ? 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very good. Sounds like it comes from the heart. I'll listen out for it in the charts!! Good luck with it.
2006-10-23 12:56:23 · answer #9 · answered by oif1983 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think the lyrics are great but what type of music is it supposed to be? That will give us a better way to give feedback but keep making em their great.
2006-10-23 12:53:38 · answer #10 · answered by jenna t 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Your chorus says please tell me what your expecting of me.You should ellaborate that in your verse telling him to let you know what he needs from you.Let him know why "you cant be" a little more.The only reason you gave was in the first verse that hes been with her.HOLLABACK IM A SINGER/SONGWRITER
2006-10-23 12:59:59 · answer #11 · answered by erlexis 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋