I walked past a tree house carrying,
The pain that life has brought me.
And then I hear those glorious sounds,
The sounds of sweeter times.
Those sweet sounds bring back memories,
Where nothing held me back.
Each step I took brang excitement,
Not fear of losing to the world.
For a short time we owe nothing to the world,
For nothing is what we have.
We did not serve the world its needs,
Instead the world served us.
we knew no sort of danger,
So we could climb forever,
We had not yet been taught in life,
The world could knock us down.
2006-10-22 13:49:24 · 14 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
i like it.
2006-10-22 13:51:18 · answer #1 · answered by WxEtte 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
for starters 'brang' isn't a word. I think the term you were looking for was 'brought'. Still, I think the poem has a thoughtful message to it.
2006-10-22 20:52:46 · answer #2 · answered by Corinne 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Try studying music
2006-10-22 20:56:01 · answer #3 · answered by john s 5 · 0⤊ 1⤋
that was pretty good and keep on writng the important thing is that people can understand your poem and i understand where you are coming from in this poem.
2006-10-22 20:54:14 · answer #4 · answered by black god 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
That's deep. I think it's great personally. So... where are you going with it though?
2006-10-22 20:51:12 · answer #5 · answered by Bella Swan 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think it's great, i don't write poetry but i know what i like and that i like!!!
2006-10-22 20:51:41 · answer #6 · answered by Aj super sexy!!! 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
very interesting poem! I like it.
2006-10-22 20:51:23 · answer #7 · answered by wil46yang 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it, good job.
2006-10-22 20:57:33 · answer #8 · answered by cfoxwell99 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
awsome you should do somting like publish it or something
2006-10-22 20:52:08 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
IT WER GOOD I NOTICED SUMONE SAID BRANG AINT A WORD WELL SO WAT NOW IT IS LOL YOUV JUS MADE IT A WORD VERY GOOD
2006-10-22 20:58:40 · answer #10 · answered by ASHLEIGH H 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋