"He appeared to me as my one inspiration that has lasted me up until this moment, and who will continue to inspire me for the rest of my life."
if it's not, how can I fix it?
2006-10-22 12:26:51 · 16 answers · asked by Anonymous in Education & Reference ➔ Words & Wordplay
"Of all the people who have inspired me, his influence has been the most lasting, and will continue to inspire me for the rest of my life."
2006-10-22 12:29:38 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 1⤋
OK, your sentence is filled with run-on and is just there. Don't worry, I was like that. I would go with: "He appears to me as my only one inspiring person, that would be the only for a short period of time. Whom will I continue be able to be with for the rest of my life?"
I totally changed the sentence, and it maybe even wrong, but there is less run-on sentences and less phrases. And make it into a little paragraph, or go with someone else option and do what they think it should be.
2006-10-24 20:18:57 · answer #2 · answered by Vicky H 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You can fix it by figuring out what you are trying to say, because this is very convoluted and lacks clarity.
Not sure if this conveys the meaning you want, but try this:
From the moment I met him, he has inspired me, and he will continue to be an inspiration for the rest of my life.
2006-10-22 19:38:20 · answer #3 · answered by old lady 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
He appeared to me as my one inspiration who has sustained me until this moment, and who will continue to inspire me for the rest of my life.
'sustained' is more emotive than 'lasted'.
2006-10-23 04:09:48 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
"This man, who will inspire me for the rest of my life, has appeared to me as my one inspiration up until this moment"
or
"This man, who has appeared to me as my one inspiration, has lasted me until this moment, and will continue the rest of my life"
2006-10-22 19:41:27 · answer #5 · answered by Tamiikaaa 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
"He appeared to me, until this moment, as my one continuing inspiration that would last the rest of my life."
I don't like two forms of inspire in the same sentence.
2006-10-22 19:34:01 · answer #6 · answered by Barkley Hound 7 · 0⤊ 2⤋
He appeared to me as my one inspiration up until this moment and he will continue to inspire me for the rest of my life.
2006-10-22 19:31:31 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 3⤋
Yikes...a lot of love with commas and run-on sentences here.
Try this...a very slight variation of LadyToas17's that makes use of the semicolon:
"Of all the people who have inspired me, his influence has been the most lasting; he will continue to inspire me for the rest of my life."
2006-10-22 22:19:52 · answer #8 · answered by frazdav 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
He seemed to me the one lasting inspiration up to this point in my life, who will continue to inspire me for the rest of it.
Brief but to the point-less flowery, perhaps.
2006-10-23 12:00:04 · answer #9 · answered by rhymer 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
if he lasted until this moment, what happened? and how will he continue to be your inspiration?
he appeared to me, an inspiration...one that will last a lifetime.
2006-10-22 19:50:29 · answer #10 · answered by robyn 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋