This verse is rap/hardcore. The beat is dark, hardcore, and angry, as is my voice. The song is rap/rock.
Black scars torn apart/ an unfinished story done before the start/ rappin for no profit it's inside my heart/ keeping others desperate some starving art/ a starving artist a business twisted/ an ended gift with a pistol whipped and/ brought out the glock shot out the dark/ rhymin for the block and keepin strong my lock/ the key is gone but the feelings there/ I'll never fall for a hoe again I swear/ a gifted kid from the beginning an ending twisted together binding/ trying to stop all this lying/ hating and decieving soon grieving at funerals then leaving/ reciepts torn up arms left cut/ bleeding and scarred up from the outside in/ as I begin to torment my sins/ up and about commiting more than them/ a simple lie etched deeper than skin/ like beauty cause a girl has to have a personality/ as well as the looks call me shallow okay/ but I won't go for hoes no more so stay away/ I'll remember this day/ from now on through ages/ through learned lessons, death, and fake acts staged/ brought up in a place/ where anger remains/ the same after days even though the words seem left astray/ standing in a way some can say only belongs to Satan/ so forgive my sins Lord and keep me from my grave/ send me up to Heaven's gates/ leave me laughing and great/ happy and pleasent as can be/ these are words felt at fifteen/ scenes of torrential bad thoughts fall/ leak from the brain and reveal all/ as I format a plan/ to be far from what I ran from/ as I go back take two looks then kick sumthin up/ and fix this problem kill all this drama/ keep my thoughts at sorry and never far from stardom//
2006-10-21 15:50:17 · 5 answers · asked by Harhar2930902 2 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Music
It sounds real tight to me, but what really matters is if it's a good verse to you. If it truly comes from inside of you and you really feel it, then its a good verse. Tru music comes from the heart and soul....if thats where you got it from, then its real, and its good. Put out what you feel...there are other people that will relate as long as you stay tru 2 u.
2006-10-21 16:00:29 · answer #1 · answered by dj_mcak 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Really good, but I wouldn't be so quick to post it on Yahoo before copyrighting it because if you ever "make it" then someone could come along and claim that they wrote it and not you.
2006-10-21 22:59:14 · answer #2 · answered by Red 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
sounds pretty damn good to me LOL it has good rhythm
2006-10-21 22:58:22 · answer #3 · answered by High On Life 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You should add something about diapers
2006-10-21 22:51:55 · answer #4 · answered by Kmore 1 · 0⤊ 1⤋
pretty good
2006-10-21 23:00:14 · answer #5 · answered by Christabelle 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋