Watch as the world passes you by
You feel so numb you can't control it
A wish for your future you'll not ignore
A hope that one day you'll be adored
Lying on the ground,
don't remember me
Forget...
everything we used to be
[chorus]
they speak,
chin up kid, things are going to be fine
one of these days you're going to shine
like the dimmest star in the night sky
then the world will stop passing you by
[repeat]
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Fall in,
Fall in to your own realm
under your circumstances
feeling overwhelmed
[chorus repeat]
I'll probably refine it later, but how is it now?
2006-10-21 09:59:22 · 11 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
Honestly after reading that I think a bear could crap out better things...
2006-10-21 10:04:24 · update #1
I really like it. Just add four lines under this.
Fall in,
Fall in to your own realm
under your circumstances
feeling overwhelmed
Then reapeat the chorus twice (to follow the same pattern). Is it a slow song?
2006-10-21 10:07:21 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Im 13 too If ur from Cali, email me
P.S. cool poem
2006-10-21 17:02:44 · answer #2 · answered by WIDE OUTxx0017 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yes I like it. You are really a good writer
2006-10-21 19:07:37 · answer #3 · answered by ▒Яenée▒ 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think you got talent see ya on stage!
2006-10-21 17:05:22 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Awesome! I will buy it when it gets produced. Don't ever give up on your dreams.
2006-10-21 17:07:09 · answer #5 · answered by Agiving M 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it. You have a lot of talent.
2006-10-21 17:03:21 · answer #6 · answered by Nico 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You seem talented,but sad.
2006-10-21 17:01:46 · answer #7 · answered by Celebrity girl 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
over indulgent rubbish
2006-10-21 17:02:50 · answer #8 · answered by nick r 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
It's good!
2006-10-21 17:07:44 · answer #9 · answered by Blue Eyes 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
don't say that i think it's really good
2006-10-21 17:06:26 · answer #10 · answered by gleeknerdfighter48 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋