a flood of information comes and rips away my mind
a picture here a picture there and all i can do is shed a tear
for this flood of information has no sence of time it comes and goes as it pleases and rips away my mind.
2006-10-20 11:36:06 · 22 answers · asked by brioduinn 3 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
Thoughtfull.
Pleasing.
Still thinking?
2006-10-20 11:44:54 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
So much information that it blows your mind? Not sure exactly what you mean. Are these thoughts that pop into your head that are so continuous and stressful that you hate it?It sounds a little like the internet. Your poem is not bad, it may just need some clarification. Maybe it needs a little more "information". It makes me think of the song Elvis sang, I need a little less information and a lot more action. My poems have a tendency to rhyme. I would probably start it.
A picture there, a picture here
All I can do is shed a tear.
No sense of reason, no sense of time
It goes as it pleases and blows my mind
Your face, your words, I cannot ignore
I beg for less but that creates more
What I am saying is I would find a story line and you would not have to rhyme. Oh man, that rhymed too--I can't help myself!
2006-10-20 13:18:02 · answer #2 · answered by Sunnidaze 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
yeah i kinda do like it actually, did you write it? By the way its sense not sence, but 8 out of 10 anyway!!
2006-10-20 11:42:30 · answer #3 · answered by cheryl 4 · 0⤊ 1⤋
I prefer another very very short to the point poem:
O Pointy Birds
O Pointy Pointy
Anoint my Head
Anointy 'nointy
2006-10-20 12:02:00 · answer #4 · answered by RM 6 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Your poetry is as shite as your spelling of the word ''sence''--must do better
2006-10-21 04:43:41 · answer #5 · answered by CHARLIEDONTSURF 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not particularly. Not much flow, no real rhyme scheme, and the imagery is very limited.
2006-10-20 11:58:19 · answer #6 · answered by caylinn1996 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Poetry is really just a jumble of mixed up words,
but it seems to be the one you wrote is totally absurd,
it seems to me you can't be bothered to check your spelling's right,
in my opinion I'd have to say, your poetry is sh**e.
There was a posh lady from Jersey,
who visited us here one ne-erday,
she went to the green, in Glasgow I mean,
she got pissed drunk, and showed us her Beardy
Boom Boom
2006-10-20 11:50:58 · answer #7 · answered by amyirmanmamansoaam 3 · 1⤊ 2⤋
Not sure I understand it enough, a bit strange and doesn't say much at all.
2006-10-20 11:49:18 · answer #8 · answered by mistickle17 5 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Sorry, but yours is a awful poem. Doesn't rhyme, doesn't scan, etc.
A better, shorter one is:
Adam
'ad 'em.
2006-10-20 12:06:01 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
What's poetic about that?
It's bloody awful.
2006-10-20 11:39:41 · answer #10 · answered by Mr Glenn 5 · 0⤊ 1⤋