Let them grow to their own true selves,
This is a height so high.
Or shrink them small with your anger,
After all to you, they are.
They are so weak and innocent,
So feed the innocent well,
Not just with food but also love,
Or feed them fear instead.
Through your hatred or through your love,
The innocent will grow.
Where will they place the fear you gave,
But to the people they once were.
Your desease of anger'll be alive,
Long after you are gone.
They no longer will be innocent,
Like you they shall be evil.
2006-10-20 10:03:34 · 9 answers · asked by . 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
Lacks syncopation - rough in flow.
Kind of contradicts itself from point to point and hard to follow.
Be sure to check spelling.
I think you have potential. Keep up the good work!
2006-10-20 10:10:03 · answer #1 · answered by YRofTexas 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I love it! You really should publish. I'm not much of a poet, but I write stories and this would be a perfect opening poem, if anyone has any idea what I'm talking about...the little quotes from books or poems at the start of every chapter in a book that relates to the content of the chapter. but that's way off topic. long story short, it's wonderful. where'd you get your inspiration from, i wonder?
2006-10-20 17:12:25 · answer #2 · answered by locoloren 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You should check out www.poetry.com Its a site where you can publish your poetry online, as well as enter poetry contests. Every year they select poems to be published in a book that you can choose to buy.
2006-10-20 23:02:25 · answer #3 · answered by thanatoz19 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not quite sure what the "Message" is in your poem, it's back and forth between subjects. Be sure to use spell check. I think you have potential.
2006-10-20 17:12:46 · answer #4 · answered by AzOasis8 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like the poem because I am a poet myself. Your poem seems a little angry you seem like something is wrong and you are upset.
2006-10-20 17:11:10 · answer #5 · answered by marlenabob 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Well i like your poem. It seems quite an angry poem to me though. My fave verse is the first one. Good imagery!
2006-10-20 17:07:22 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
this is reeeeaaaally good. it would prolly make a good song if you made it a little longer.
2006-10-20 17:15:31 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
it's wonderful you should publish it
2006-10-20 17:07:01 · answer #8 · answered by OhSnApEpIcPwNaGe 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I can feel You
2006-10-20 17:09:43 · answer #9 · answered by Peter G 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋