How should I word my Thesis?

Question

I am doing the history of Holidays. How it got from the original origins to the quite commericalized holidays of today. Im trying to get the point across that holidays have less value and purity from there original source. How can i word this?

Answer 1

A thesis statement should express one main idea. Readers need to be able to see that your paper has one main point. If your thesis expresses more than one idea, then you might confuse readers bout the subject of your paper.

Next, a strong thesis statement takes some sort of stand. Ok so remember that your thesis needs to show your conclusions about a subject. AND the thesis takes a stand. It should be possible for reasonable people to disagree on the subject you're exploring in your paper. Because a good thesis indicates your point of view on this subject, it should justify discussion of the topic.

Ok so for example...
"Companies need to exploit the marketing potential of the Internet, and web pages can provide both advertising and customer support."
So this statement is weak because a reader wouldn't be able to decide if the paper is about marketing on the Internet or web pages. So, a better way of putting it...
"Because the Internet is filled with tremendous marketing potential, companies should exploit this potential by using web pages that offer both advertising and customer support.

This is Strong thesis statement because it shows the relationship between two ideas. A GREAT many clear and engaging thesis statements contain words like because, since, so, although, unless, and however.

A strong thesis statement is also specific. It will show your reader exactly what your paper will be about. Also, by making it specific it will help restrict your paper to a manageable subject.

So if I were to re-word your thesis, pick one reason why holidays are commercialized.
for example
"Due to modernization of technology in the last twenty years, American holidays such as Christmas, Thanksgiving, and Saint Patrick's day no longer portray the holidays' original purity and values."

Answer 2

The title should be "Holiday Road" as in the name of Lindsey Buckingham's song from National Lampoon's "Vacation".

Answer 3

something like
throughout the years the true essence of holidays has been marred by comercialism and have lost much of its significance.
but dont copy this because that would be plaigarism

Answer 4

The silk route.