A cut on the wrist slice, and i miss
the blood trickles down
i havent smiled since i frowned
this world does not satisfy me
im fake all around
when i laugh, i really cry
when i speak, i really lie
im scared of this life, that i do not deserve
i play chicken with death but chicken out and swerve
the cutes get deeper as the hatrid grows
being tortured is all i know
tortured by life, and teased by death
im just as sorry as the rest
the blood seeps through every thread
i dont know why im not already dead
2006-10-20 07:30:02 · 5 answers · asked by Lil 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
That is the smartest thing i have ever heard anyone say aboput anything ever!!!
2006-10-20 07:44:47 · answer #1 · answered by Bastronaught 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This poem is like you said, depressing. Its good you are not really suicidal because the poem would definitely leave the reader to believe so. However, it is very well written and it must have felt good to get those feelings out. Poetry's a great outlet. Good job!
2006-10-20 07:35:23 · answer #2 · answered by Petri 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow, were you a Suicidal Tendencies or Morresey fan? Just kidding. The poem is good but, let the reader know your not depressed or they may call a suicide hotline for you and fill you with psych drugs.
2006-10-20 07:44:42 · answer #3 · answered by disorder74 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You conveyed your feelings quite nicely. I don't see this as depressing, it just conveys the emotions of a tortured soul. There were some mispelled words, but overall, I like the flow.
2006-10-20 07:39:38 · answer #4 · answered by Barak 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You're sooooooooo EMO!!!
2006-10-20 07:38:49 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋