It starts out with a young freshman girl going to a new school with no friends. She grew up in a temple with a famil friend after her parents died 10 years ago. And she hasn't smiled since. She bumps into the quarter back of her new school football team and then finds out that they have every class together and he's her personal tour guide around school. And that's about it for now......do you guys have anyone thing that would sound good to go with this?
2006-10-19 14:07:06 · 8 answers · asked by Serenity Casablanca 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
A talking psychic rabbit who only eats fried food and lemonade--
2006-10-19 14:20:22 · answer #1 · answered by rsdudm 5 · 1⤊ 1⤋
Yeah I would like to suggest you change the role of some characters. They don't have enough depth to last a long story. If you are only looking for a short story then this is a great start.
If you are wanting a longer story then i'd suggest you give the characters some depth so they can last the distance. for example I'm thinking along the lines of the 'quarterback'. It could be changed to the guy trying to be the quarterback or the star player even like a kicker thats never missed or on a perfect streak. I think that the quarterback is a little overdone in most modern stories.
And this story will only ever go one direction the only possible ending to please anyone is that they fall for each other and... well thats it. Maybe then she is a sport star as well and very good but struggles to keep committments to the team etc. Readers want characters they can relate to, and this is the type of girl we know but its hard to sympathise with because she's had more tradgedy than most of us. And hardly anyone is the quarterback so we only admire these people and find it hard to directly connect.
Maybe then make a love triangle thing too, where she thinks she is falling for the popular guy but she goes for the school clown. This is the sort of story America craves for! They always want a funny nice guy to win!
Anyways the best advice you can get is to make a list of characters and invent their backgrounds so that they are all individual (and not too cliche) and then put them in your plot and you'll be able to see how they react to each other. Once you do this it will just flow like you are telling a story rather than writing one.
2006-10-19 21:28:26 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yea and she could gain some jealous enemies. The quarterback could always be asking how is his hair and he will walk threw the cafeteria noticing that milk was a bad choice. Then as the year goes by one of the worse days of the girls life happened. Her and the quarterback went out, as friends of course, and they were out in the mall, in the foodcourt eating. And then suddenly, someone runs out of nowhere and stills their drinks, so they go on a massive chase to get their drinks back. They chase this man all threw the mall, then the quarterback trips, and falls alittle bit behind. The guy with the drinks goes and escapes into an escape car. Then they notify the police to try to get the amber alerts working and to start the man hunt before something happens to the drinks, or they go bad. Then they begin to notice that its boring but its part of their life. The end..........
2006-10-19 21:20:07 · answer #3 · answered by stargurl_5887 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Keep with your ideas. Carry a tablet around with you and just write to write. IF you hit a block, skip ahead to what you want to happen and write that, then come back and fill in how you got to that point. The trick is to not stop writing. Once you think you've gotten your entire concept on paper, then take it and type it out...and you'll find that you're self-editing and changing things, or reassembling your own thoughts. You will do this several times until you have a final copy.
2006-10-19 21:16:56 · answer #4 · answered by tjjone 5 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Establish a strong relationship between your two characters. Feel deeply about them or you won't be able to have a strong story. Write elements of fear, attraction, disappointment. They should be ill-suited at least in one way. They are kept apart, then they reunite. Two steps forward, one step backward (conflict) keeps the story interesting.
2006-10-19 21:49:56 · answer #5 · answered by ? 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
the quarterback is a zombie and only the girl can stop him
2006-10-19 21:10:25 · answer #6 · answered by cmist12 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
just don't do a scary ending to it,, make it like you already started,, sweet ending to it,, when the book is out let us know,,
2006-10-19 21:10:34 · answer #7 · answered by quitelovableman 4 · 0⤊ 1⤋
have many pencils and be focused at all times and be imaginative
2006-10-19 21:14:34 · answer #8 · answered by El tio 1 · 0⤊ 1⤋