seven minutes in heaven?
it felt like ninety five
where every second is a decade
and every five goes back in time
to begin again where we began
ive lost you but ive found
a new reason for breathing
a whole new reason for seeing
with my own two eyes again
its like they've waited just to see this
a whole new world beyond the silence
that we lay in, blissfully carefree
as the darkness closed around you
moonlight illuminates your skin
just the way you like it
anything for you it seems
you dont need to say a word
infact its better if you dont
write it down and keep it secret
i dont even need to see it
just lay here bathed in beauty
its the one thing you do best
effortlessly climbing mountains
effortlessly making sense
can you see yourself in my eyes?
i can see yourself in mine
i would need a grand thesaurus
and a million years in time
2006-10-19 12:59:32 · 8 answers · asked by Anonymous in Social Science ➔ Psychology
i could write the longest letter
ask the gods to try much harder
but they never could do better
perfection lives inside of you
if i had my own little way
then we'd be here forever
i would make you smile each day
and time would change to suit us
we dont need another soul
inside you is all i need
from your essence comes the energy
i need to live and breathe
no one else can take your place
take you by the riverside
we could drown in blissful sorrow
i could die inside your eyes
as we leave now for a better place
the memory will stick
im sorry if i write these words
with nothing but my dick : )
2006-10-19 12:59:43 · update #1
with nothing but my d*ck : )
2006-10-19 13:06:33 · update #2
Read nicely but who is this "D*ck"...is he your one and only God or a one and only true love?
2006-10-19 13:28:19 · answer #1 · answered by oldtimer 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Kid it's cliche and it just doesn't make sense. Not even in an "it-makes-sense-because-it-doesnt-make-sense" way. Some of it is nice but your added line ruins it.
2006-10-19 20:15:16 · answer #2 · answered by flyLeft alto 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Nice poem.
2006-10-19 20:05:13 · answer #3 · answered by Krash 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Loved it
2006-10-19 20:15:02 · answer #4 · answered by Greg S 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
awesome
2006-10-19 20:06:05 · answer #5 · answered by cnderellah 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
go away wally
2006-10-19 20:08:21 · answer #6 · answered by Twinkle S 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This is brilliant.
2006-10-19 20:04:13 · answer #7 · answered by scrapper723 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
well that was deep and meaningful
2006-10-19 20:07:48 · answer #8 · answered by kimbridge 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋