this is the first time i write a poem!?

Question

I really took a long time to write this poem, tell me your opinion?

A Friend Most True

I need to know if you’re my true friend,
will you be by my side until the end?
Can I tell you my secrets deep,
and trust them in your heart you’ll keep?
We are neither of us without our flaws,
can you accept mine as I will yours?
I’ll be a shoulder to cry on when you’re blue,
will you be there for me when I need you?
No matter how busy I will make time for you,
if you are busy will you make time for me too?
I will take your hand and comfort your tears,
will you hold me and soothe my fears?
I will give you joy and many warm smiles,
can we share that even across many miles?
I will not forget what’s important to you,
will you remember what’s important to me too?
With you my most favourite things I’ll share,
If only I know do you truly care?
If you can accept me as I do you,
then I will know you are a friend most true.

by Vanessa Robertson (me)

Answer 1

wow what a great poem you write i wish i could write a poem like you!!!!!!!

Answer 2

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Answer 3

That is really good, I like how you've stated that your partner must be there for you, and not only you there for him. So often now a days the relationships are so one sided.That poem could be a great deal of help, for those who have a hard time understanding love. Love isn't love till you give it away,its put in your heart but its not meant to stay, so be sure to give it away. And you'll see love in return. LOVE LOVE

Answer 4

That is very beautiful. put it on poetry.com. you could buy the book with your poem in it. I think yours should be first.

However it's hard to wrapin in the poem section. I don't like editin a poem just for them.
Keep up the good work and try short stories. It's nice.

Answer 5

A real friend is someone who walks in when the rest of the world walks out.
Don't walk in front of me, I may not follow; Don't walk behind me, I may not lead; Walk beside me, and just be my friend.

Answer 6

Wow thats deep. Vanessa. I'm moved by it. Not to gushy.

Answer 7

That is really good! You should write more poems, you have a lot of talent.

Answer 8

WoW
That is really good. You are a great writer. I wish I could write. That is great. I love it.
☺

Answer 9

Thre cheers for poetress vanessa..hip hip hurray..hip hip hurray..hip hip hurray

Answer 10

I think it's great! I envy people with talent!!
:-)
Hope you do some more...