it's for my debate.. is it persuasive enough?

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i edited that.. is it ok now?? is my grammar right and what else do i need to add.. pls help me about the info


Muslims should be able to wear whatever they want just like everybody else in this country. Its their right to wear veil, its not only their right its also their duty to follow the religion as they have been preached by their religion. It is worn as a sign of respect and a traditional muslim woman without a veil would be seen as disrespecting her husband and society.. Everyone has the right to wear whatever they please as long as its not harming anyone else. And a veil harms nobody. its a free country some people want to cover up as a visible symbol of their faith. . If they think that their hair or their faces should be seen only by their husbands, then it's none of our business.

Answer 1

Great stuff but all I'd add is that whilst its true (and always should be) that they can wear what they like and express themselves and their religion anyway they see fit, because it is not considered by most (muslims) an article of faith but rather of culture, it should be considered when attempting to integrate into a different culture.

ps: by integrate I do not mean give up former cultural identities but merely adapt them where necessary.

Answer 2

Apart from grammatical errors, I would dispute your assertion that everyone in this country is able to wear whatever they want. I prefer to walk the streets wearing nothing, but you could bet your last pound that I'd soon be arrested. There are also areas where it is not permissable to wear 'hoodies', and you have to remove crash helmets when entering a bank/building society.

As far as Muslim dress goes, I have no bone to pick with women wanting to wear veils, whether they be simple head scarves or full veils. What you need to understand, however, is that it does cause alienation, particularly when people are unable to 'read' body language and facial expressions. So much is given by facial expressions that it adds to the communication process. There is also the added problem with receiving the information from a person who's first language may not be English, being 'dumbed down' by having a physical barrier in place.

Having said all that, I believe that our predecessors fought for this country to remain free, and it should remain so.

Answer 3

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Answer 4

'Its' should be 'it's' where you are writing the shortened form of 'It is'. Better still, if this argument is in writing only, and you are not reading it out, then you should write out 'It is' in full.
This probably a word processing error but one of your sentences begins with a lower case 'i' instead of a capital.
'its a free country some people want to cover up as a visible symbol of their faith' is not a grammatical sentence. I think you meant to put in the word 'if' in there and forgot. A more grammatical way of writing it is
'It's a free country and if some people want to cover up as a visible symbol of their faith, if they think that their hair or their faces should be seen only by their husbands, then it's none of our business.' - running the two sentences together. Or 'It's a free country: some people want to cover up as a visible symbol of their faith.'

A good way of checking if your sentences make sense, or are grammatical, is to read them out loud. I count myself good at grammer, but still catch myself writing stuff which makes sense when I read it, but is not very clear when read out aloud.

Your argument is fine and well expressed and I think you have all the main ideas there.

Answer 5

Good arguement but what about the respect for other cultures like the christian one they have chosen to live in? Is there not also a health and safety issue, for example when driving? Anyone with an eye defect is required to register it with the DVLA, veils restrict normal and peripheral vision so what about that?

Answer 6

i think you are right about freedom to wear what you want, that means any religion, but i think there is a lot of people who would disagree. if you go on yahoo and type Muslim veil there is loads of pages about the argument. if you feel strongly about it,go get em.

Answer 7

I'd add the idea of a uniform like
what if a service man, who wears the cammo fatigues,
were told that he could not wear them outside, cause it makes people think of war?
well, to him, its a badge of honor.

or what if someone told you,
you could not wear the colors red or blue,
becuase of the crypts and bloods ( gangs, thats their colors)

if someone mentions covering your id,
mention
its not illegal to wear sunglasses, and that hides who you are,
and esp this time of year, I see people walking around with halloween masks, and that totally covers their face and hair.
they are alloud to do that aren't they?

Answer 8

Not bad at all i must say,but and their is always a but.
So taking your debate further, may my wife dress as she pleases in an Islamic country.

Answer 9

Yes.

Answer 10

This is persuasive enough and you argue your stance clearly, but the "its" should be it's.