His warm smile
His contagious laugh
His caring nature
His inviting eyes
His strong hands
His gentle touch
My burning desire is tempted by his presence
I yearn to feel his lips on my body, To feel him inside me, fulfilling my every need
With him, hapiness is what I see
Is this a forbidden dream or reality to come
Only time will tell if he will capture me and take me to pure extacy
Until then in my dreams he can stay making me weaker with every passing day
Is it at least decent? Dont be cruel but be honest :o)
THANKS
♥ MANDEE ♥
2006-10-18 02:17:19 · 12 answers · asked by MANDEE 3 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
sorry
extacy = ecstasy
hapiness = happiness
lol thanks dude!
2006-10-18 02:27:03 · update #1
you so horny .... you love him long time .....
pretty good actually
2006-10-18 02:20:27 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Its beautiful Mandee, I'd just like to think you'd written it 'bout me. I love you.
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2006-10-18 09:22:34 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Looks like a one way street -no structure-no rhyme-no rhythem -Doesn't flow ya know -Add what you could do to harmonize and relate-it is a dance and it takes two.
2006-10-18 09:23:48 · answer #3 · answered by super stud 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
there are spelling mistakes and grammatical errors and apart from that the subject is boring. It is also self-centered and bland. Hope this helps
2006-10-18 09:21:10 · answer #4 · answered by Harry Karry 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yes--any guy would love to see that written about him!
2006-10-18 09:18:51 · answer #5 · answered by MaryBeth 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
oh,i love it!its so cute!i guess,the person is really very lucky,about whom you wrote this poemâ¥
2006-10-18 09:21:12 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
you know girl its great i have poems but this its a master piece
2006-10-18 09:20:33 · answer #7 · answered by maan_rey5693 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it I think any guy would too.
2006-10-18 09:22:20 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
its nice, it would make good lyrics for a song too.
2006-10-18 09:21:43 · answer #9 · answered by chiara 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I love it!!! Very good poem.
2006-10-18 09:30:56 · answer #10 · answered by T.G. 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
sweet
2006-10-18 09:22:43 · answer #11 · answered by X's Mommy 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋