a swarm of bees went flying
buzzing on their merry way
their hive had been destroyed
ere they need a place to stay
they searched the country over
and just outside of town
they decided on a place
they all could settle down
it was a service station
on the roadside all alone
the queen said we shall settle here
and call this place our home
it was a chevron station
with it's stripes of blue and white
so they all began to work
but one bee took his flight
for he saw an esso station
just across the street
he said i'll make this place my home
here's where i'll sleep and eat
this story has a moral
and it is "do not be proud"
you'll always find an esso bee
in each and every crowd
2006-10-17 17:35:03 · 17 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
I luved it thanx for the laugh.
2006-10-17 18:33:24 · answer #1 · answered by ? 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Terrible/Rotten. Some words to me are unknown like esso bee, ere. Never heard of that!
2ndly you are giving free advertising to a gas station brand. Why???
ending in each and every crowd should be reading in every crowd.
Work on it! Make it work! Sleep on it, re-work it!
2006-10-17 17:40:59 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
I love it! It has personality, humor, and a little honesty, most of all it's original and yet still follows all the basic rules! Great Job, keep writing!
2006-10-17 17:37:56 · answer #3 · answered by raefae 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
This poem is quite good, but don't you think it is a little boring,if you could add some interesting words it will be better.
2006-10-17 17:42:39 · answer #4 · answered by hpz ftw 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Great, it really is beautiful , rims , have a massage, and is easy to read . if it from you I would like to congratulate you for such a talent, and believe me I now what I am talking about.
2006-10-17 17:46:05 · answer #5 · answered by santa s 4 · 0⤊ 1⤋
cute. If your into writing poetry try the website Poetry.com
2006-10-17 17:43:21 · answer #6 · answered by Barbiq 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
yes. it indeed has a moral. there is always that one bee in every crowd.
2006-10-17 18:15:37 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow. I think that's really good. Much better than I could do.
2006-10-17 17:38:13 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
it kinda sounds like more of a lymerick or something.
2006-10-17 17:57:38 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's cute.
2006-10-17 17:37:48 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋